This was a really great story. I loved the adventure with the toys. You told it in such an interesting way, showing it from the perspective of the non-adventurers, the ones who stay home waiting for news. You might think that that would end up being boring because there's no action of frustrating because you don't know what's going on, but you told it wonderfully, giving just enough drama and hints of action and the plot of what was going on to keep the reader interested. I think it worked much better than the normal way of telling adventures, especially in this story.

I also liked the character of Makito, how he was clearly an ignorant jerk, but a kind of nice one, or at least well-intentioned. I also liked how he was the catalyst for a bunch of changes in Yuugi's life without knowing that he was, what the elements were that changed, or really much of anything. He thought the issue was one thing and it was another thing completely, and yet he still managed to be one of the greatest factors in affecting it, all while he was trying to be the same for the imaginary and rather unrelated issue.

All in all, great story. You are a really wonderful writer with some great ideas and the skill to make them interesting. Congratulations on a job well done.

Adi

That was...slick. Smooth move there, killer. At the end I was like, "D-aw~!" The way it all came back to how Yugi never made the first move and how they're talking about just little things changing and- gah! It was all so intricately woven and it turned out to be the most beautiful textile I've seen in a long time.

I'll admit it confused me a bit but I like it :D

Nyygghghg it is past midnight and it about seven hours I have to present a project that is worth about half of my honors lit grade and it is taking a completely ridiculous amount of willpower to stop reading, despite all that.

But seriously. Adorable. Completely. Adorable. (And it figures that after worrying and wondering and stressing and arguing about it, the moment they stop paying attention they fall right into the affection they were arguing about in the first place.)

...Damn you, and damn you ability to make me really, really obsessed. (Yugioh is doing things to my grades, not to mention my sleeping patterns, that almost no fandom has done before.)

Aw. Just... just... aw.
(This is probably the most sickeningly adorable Yami/Yugi fic I have read to date, but I'm not complaining. It's cute.)

This is really good. Original too... I don't think I've ever come across another fic that had Yuugi's father in it... ah. It's so believable...

I have to say though I got a lil confused at times it was very fun to read & had some great ideas & twists!! ^_^

PS id like to ask if u humm this seems awkward ok im working on my first ever fic & your idea about Yugi’s hands I found a real stroke of brilliance. I personally got caught up in the dubbed anime first(I know blasphemous for a real fan ^_^ but what can I say)& always found the episode with Yugi trapped in the fire very intriguing don’t really know why, but id never considered what that’d do to his hands & I was wondering if you’d mind if I used a similar idea in my hopefully soon to be story id of course give credit for the idea to you as it is yours but if you’d let me use it id be thrilled if you’d rather I not that will not offend me in any way for you to ask me not to as it is your idea & u have alright to not want others to use it ^-^ I do hope you’ll let me know ether way again great story very cute!

so col

Yay, they did manage to come to an understanding. And it's nice to see that Yugi's parents are going to try to understand each other too again.

I think Yugi's father's words to his son were exactly what Yugi needed to know his father accepted and loved him even if he wasn't what he had expected.

Even if Yugi isn't dependent on his father's approval anymore, it's still nice to know your parents love you for who you are.

Well, that was certainly an action-packed chapter. Yugi and his friends just saved the world again; another day in the life, eh? I like how they seemed to work as a team so flawlessly and how it seemed to be so natural for them to do, especially since we got to see what it was like from the perspective of someone who isn't in on it like Yugi and the others.

This definitely means a lot of revelations for Yugi's father though. He's finally realises that his son is grown up and does know what he's doing. And I do think he cares for Yugi so I hope they can solve the problems they have now.

Yugi finally made things clear to his dad. I'm glad he isn't going to choose to hide who he is anymore. It just wouldn't be Yugi then.

And the whole waiting thing. That moment between Yugi and Yami was very sweet. I hope Yugi does start managing to get his answers soon though, even if Yami is willing to wait an eternity for him.

Wow, total miscommunication there. Their arguments are intriguing though, to say the least. I would agree more with Yami though that a kiss is something that will change two friends' relationship. Yugi's argument is interesting though. And it's so true that they have this special relationship, being who they are that others just can't understand. It does make it hard to tell what you're feeling and stuff then.

Yeah, that story...wow, that was farfetched. But again, totally more believable than the truth. And when Yami was cheering Yugi up...that was very amusing.

And I agree that it's not that Yugi can't take care of himself but that his friends just don't ever want to risk him getting into danger so they always try to protect him from it no matter what. It's very...hm, can't think of a word to describe it yet, but beautiful fits, maybe.

I find it amazing how you can weave such a big misunderstanding so flawlessly. You can actually get Yugi and Yami's talks about their relationship to sound completely platonic when they speak of it since they're referring to totally different things, but to anyone else, it really would sound like they were talking about a romantic relationship or something. It makes for great drama.

Interesting. Not many stories focus on Yugi's family. It doesn't seem like they're off to a very good start though. Yugi's dad and Yami already hate each other.