|Reviews for Death Was Only The Beginning|
| Sicklen 5/27/06 . chapter 1
wow, man that was awesome, but, um, I'm sure some one else has said this but you spell it 'Kyuzo' not 'Kyuuzou'. Well maybe thats how you slepp it in japeness or something, wow, I can't spell japeness, er sry, man, don't worry 'bout spelling, because you at lest have the fact that I suck worse at it then you ). Bye, er, no harm in the spelling of the name right? Bye, Have a nice day. -Bows deeply-
| Jade 2/5/06 . chapter 1
I enjoyed reading this! Are you making another one?
| ashwings101 1/25/06 . chapter 1
Fun to kill...
Yes that is Kyuuzou trying to find fun people to slash... D
| Bakeneko 12/4/05 . chapter 1
Br...M. _ In real life, I think anyone that cold would be classified as a clinical sociopath...or maybe schizoid, or one of those personality disorders. Unfortunately, that would seriously inhibit his ability to fall in love. *cough* Then again, it's not exactly normal, warm, fuzzy lurve, is it? So the 'ship fits his personality. Anyway,
(A) It's anime-how many of these guys could you meet in real life anyway? and (B) Traumatized Kyuuzou sobbing over dead family members before "hardening his heart" to "make the pain go away" would just...annoy me. Although I have to wonder if something like that happened to Ukyou...Heck, Ukyou was probably molested by Nobuseri as a child...which would be an entirely different story. ; Point is, your Kyuuzou is pretty extreme, but more original than the old "He used to be a really sweet kid who loved his pet bunnies, until he got traumatized!" idea. I see what you meant when you said Kyuu-san had become one of *your* characters...or have you become one of *his* writers? Bwahaha...Be careful he doesn't take over your mind and force you to lurk in dark alleys, murdering overly-angsty teenage boys...
"Kyuuzou stopped as the bamboo sword was over his head, and slowly let it fall."
*stopped, holding the bamboo sword over his head, and...*
"In retaliation, he soon smelled the assassin's blood begin to coat the floor as well,each of their movements become slower as they injured each other, but each had enough skill to not be killed by the other."
I think the part starting with "each" should be another sentence.
"He closed his eyes and listened,and pictured every move in his head."
*...listened, picturing every move...*
"There were blood spatters on the wall. That must have been where the assassins flicked the blood off their swords. One panel was knocked down, blood soaking into the weave."
I just really like that, heheh. It feels so realistic. You pictured these events very vividly, no? This is your best-written story, IMO. I would say I wished I had your talent for imagining death, blood, and violence, but perhaps that would sound rather wrong. _ Oh, and maybe the assassins "had flicked" the blood off their swords...me and my grammatical nitpicks.
"...swinging the sword as hard as he could, slicing the attacking assassin..."
*..he sliced the attacking assassin...*
| WithBrokenWings 11/30/05 . chapter 1
Interesting story... The only thing that bothers me is that Kyuuzou seems rather emotionless in this story. Not that he is a really emotional person, but he ought to have some emotions hearing his whole family get killed. Anyway, great job!
| Matsuo Michiyo 11/17/05 . chapter 1
So you assume Kyuzo-dono was, as they say, born to kill? Well, if that's the case, I won't argue with you.
I'm not surprised our views on Kyuzo's childhood are different. I had exepcted tears, but nevertheless, this was a good read. A real trea to all Kyuzo fangirls, and fanboys (?), would enjoy. Keep it up, and I'll be looking forward to more of you stories. )
| Samuraiko 11/17/05 . chapter 1
I like... very well done. Do keep going!