 Psycho Tangerine 2007-03-31 . chapter 1I got a bit confused at first until I realized this was AU and they were highschoolers. I didn't get how Alyssa's dad could force her to go to a college. She's the one who would have to apply to Yale, he couldn't do it for her. And, if she's now an adult (since she's college age)it's realy her decision. So I'm glad she stood up to him at the very end. |
 Kurumi-chan 2006-08-11 . chapter 1Kawaii!Awsome possum!Not many do Cole/Alyssa as a couple, or write fanfics about them^^Thanx, I totally love it pleaseohpleaseohpleaseohplease do a sequel, your writing skills are superb keep up the good work=^.^= |
 Miss Lizzy Bennet 2005-11-21 . chapter 1Hey very nice! I liked it very much, I think that it was a little of wild force and dino thunder, I don't know, just 'cause of that thing of high school, but I liked it anyway, it's very different! And your fic is very good, it is your first fic, isn't it? Very nice, continue writing, you write very well.
So, Alyssa's father is very hard! Poor Alyssa and Cole, they are very sweet together, you wrote it very well, I mean the emotions and all. Well Alyssa and Cole aren't my favorite couple(Actually my favorite are Wes and Jen), but I like them, I think that they really are cute together.
And nice song! Good choice, I put this song in one of my fics, I really like it. Very nice.
I think that you should write more, you write very well. Just try don't put the exclamation in some pointes, just like "asked Taylor with a very serious face!" But that's all, you just did it in two scenes, nothing to worry about.
That's all! Continue writing! Your fics are very good! I'll add this fic to my favorites! Nice job, really nice! :) |