ur evil...good writer...but still evil

know what? i really hate u. no literally

Waaaaaiiiilllll...Nooooooooo...Sniff. Sob sob, oh Phoenix, how could you? There better be a sequel somewhere! I hate it when they die. It makes me all sad ( Write more?

*sniff sniff sniff* Usagi... poor Usagi and Mamoru... *sniff sniff sniff*

Great story! PLEASE CONTINUE SOON!

I want More!That was really good! Please continue...(BTW Chapter 8 and 9 are the same)

Sugoi! Keep writing.. I wanna know what happens next! _

I really like how you write Jedite. He's kind of the kooky side-kick in this one isn't he. Let me know when you write another part and I'll R&R that too.

Interesting turn of events. Things move a bit quickly in this story. Not that I'm complaining, but if you ever want to revise this, maybe you might try stretching it out a little. Otherwise, I love your diologue. Very realistic and funny.

Aww! Poor Usagi! You could maybe put some more detail in. You know, what they;re doing as they talk, what they're thinking, how their voices sound or what their facial expressions are. It's not really needed, but it might add more dimensions. The argument is really true to the characters though. I can imagine them saying those very things.

MORE MORE MORE MORE! That was great !

Still got my interest. I think it's rendevous, but I could be mistaken.

Nice background info. There are some minor grammar things...not too bad. If you want an editor have you thought of asking a beta reader? Just go to the beta reader section of the forum, you might find someone. Good so far though.

Ah, so it's an alternate universe story? I haven't decided whether I like it yet, but I'm going to keep reading. It's well written, it deserves to be read.

OMG OMG! i love this! U are an absolute genius!