xmegaminoaix 2008-06-14 . chapter 4Well surprisingly, you are not the only one who watched Titanic a lot of times even if it is kind of out of date... i guess, but I'll still love that show. I like the story... and like almost any YohxAnna story that's sad... I cried after. T_T Well, just keep making more Yohna fanficts. |
tituna 2006-05-26 . chapter 4 I´m crying too!It´so sad! |
Natia 2006-03-09 . chapter 4 Is it okay to admit that I'm crying? |
Jun Tao 2005-11-30 . chapter 4 Hey, my little brother sounds like my Rio at the end! Please keep writing! I like it. |
~*~rumia~*~ 2005-11-27 . chapter 4 loved dis story!^_^ yoh and anna 4ev@ + always! poor len/ren! but hes happy!^_^ |
~*~rumia~*~ 2005-11-27 . chapter 3 hope len/ren's ok! |
~*~rumia~*~ 2005-11-27 . chapter 2 poor anna!:( |
~*~rumia~*~ 2005-11-27 . chapter 1 y did yoh ave 2 die!;_; |
LET'S BLEACH IT 2005-11-26 . chapter 4omg i like it! plz update! i want another chapter
plz |
Felix-samma 2005-11-26 . chapter 4haha! kawaii! |
mystery93 2005-11-25 . chapter 4 i hate your story very much .But it is damn exciting. |
electric-sky 2005-11-25 . chapter 4Wow. That was a very sad story, and it captured the shock and anger of a loved one's death well. *solemn nod*
The only part that irked me a bit was the end -- It seemed a little too rushed. I feel that, in a story such as this, the end should be slower, and more powerful. Maybe if Ren offered her the knife instead? It might emphasize that all he wanted was for her to be happy, and she could make the choice for herself.
As well, a hesitation before taking the knife may show that she didn't want to leave Ren upset either, but she realized that if she left herself the way she was, suffering, Ren would suffer more than she.
Just some advice that you don't have to listen to. It's just my thoughts, nothing more. ;) *tacklehug* |