Wow! This is really good, Persephone :)) I like how you make way for the sequel, by making Stormy swear that she will be avenged, right before she dies :) It makes the ending really exciting, gets people on the edge of their seats and leaves them wanting more, which is good, 'cause then they'll go and read the sequel :)) btw, If yer having problems with yer writing, 'cause yer feeling slightly uninspired, make a tape of songs that remind of you of the fan fic yer writing, and that inspire you on what to write next :) I've done that, and it's been a great help with my LJS fan fic, when I keep getting the dreaded writers block :)

oh so sad so very very sad will she be avenged? loved it

Ah, different...I just wondering how in the heck she's going to get revenge-if she is...in a clever way. Sounds interesting