Reviews for If Sweet Things Spoil

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win-chun90 2008-06-19 ch 21,	abuseSorry I havn't reveiwed lately I dont have the internet anymore! Anyway, love the new chapters there getting so interesting I wish they wouldn't end!
I Follwed The White Rabbit 2008-06-04 ch 21,	abuseYAY! you're gunna make sequile,right? Right?!?!?! (i spelled something wrong there...I just know it)
iCraft 2008-05-28 ch 21,	abuseAww it's a step in the right direction. :) At least they're on good terms now. I gotta admit, I was a little worried when Calloway got the award, but Alyssa's entrance was AMAZING. Awesome chapter! :)
haha21 2008-05-24 ch 21,	abuseI suppose Willy and Alyssa will get back together soon. And I smell trouble coming from Callaway (and not the golf brand) =D. And hhahahahahaha. Who! Names in the author's notes! Ahahah. Well, I will be waiting for the next updates so don't take so long. =)
Yva J. 2008-05-23 ch 21,	abuseWay to go, Alyssa! That was positively brilliant. I loved it, and Kellie in her pink dress was such a nice added touch to this, although I am a worry wart, and I think Calloway may still try something sneaky and underhanded, although I love seeing him thrown to the wolves. The gala scene was just wonderful, I could see everything happening and I am so glad that that was where Calloway was exposed. You outdid yourself with this one. Truly a brilliant bit of writing. Bravo. Not much else to say except that I am looking forward to some of your Willy and Alyssa goodness, but I am also anxious to see what sort of plan Willy has. He seems to be getting back to his old self again, which is good, but somehow I know there's work to be done to reverse the horrid effects of what Calloway did. Yikes, that man really is a monster. Now, I'm so looking forward to more.
iCraft 2008-05-22 ch 20,	abuseaw, they're not back together yet. :( haha, hope you get the next chapter out soon, i miss seeing alyssa and willy together, they're just so cute as a couple. :D
haha21 2008-05-21 ch 20,	abuseCool story. Hope you update soon.
Everto Tonsor 2008-05-17 ch 20,	abuseWhat's the green liquid?! Is it illegal drugs? Addictive and or dangerous substances?!! I gotta know! Is Cabot gonna tell everyone whats in it at the Gala?! The suspense is terrible...I hope it'll last.
Yva J. 2008-05-17 ch 20,	abuseThat chapter was a delicate balance between the downright slimyness of Cullen Calloway, and the sweet innocence of Kellie. I loved the doll and the teddy bear. (I'm actually in the process of making a Wilder Wonka bear, so it's just perfect, IMO.). That was such a sweet added touch, though. :) I personally loved the chapter, particularly when Charlie took it upon himself to put his arm around her and protect Kellie from Calloway. Brilliant stuff here, and a very positive display of Charlie's overall goodness. On the other hand, Calloway gives me the absolute creeps and his interactions with that little girl always gives me the shivers. You have such an effective antagonist here. I'm so glad, and relieved that Charlie was there when he showed up. Of course, having him bursting into their house like that really demonstrates that he has even less in the scruples department than before. Truly an utterly creepy but effective performance there...eek! I kept thinking that Charlie ought to bring the little girl to the factory and get her out of harm's way. That's how deeply this chapter touched me. Truly a good one. Sometimes the chapters we don't like turn out to be the most empowering. I can relate to that, btw. I didn't like writing the latest chapter to my story either...but sometimes you just gotta do what you gotta do. This story totally rocks! :) Keep at it and post soon.
iCraft 2008-05-17 ch 19,	abuseThis was a nice chapter, even with the absence of happiness. Poor Willy, he's still hurting. :( I'm glad Alyssa's trying to make good with him though. And I thought it was funny when she called Calloway a twit. I knew she was smarter than him. :) By the way, I heart Oscar Wilde, so I was uber happy when I recognized the line. :) PS-Nothing beats being pushed around in fluffy pink clouds on a sunny summer day. :) That sounds like a nice line for a happy song, lol. :D
Yva J. 2008-05-16 ch 19,	abusePositively brilliant! I love this. I just wish that Willy would have, at least, listened. I know that he is hurt and angry, but he needs to know that she finally stood up for herself and her principles. Now that she has seen this green ooze from the Calloway bar, she now knows the extent of how scary all of this is. Thank goodness for that, but I am guessing you have a few more twists and turns for us here. I guess she will eventually find out exactly what is going on through her contact with 'Allied Research'. I am just so glad that she is now taking control of things and standing up to Calloway as well as to Shay. At one point, I felt sorry for Shay, but now I don't. She's as easy to maneuver as a chess piece, of course, her behaviors are realistic given what is going on. At any rate, it's about time that she stopped acting passive, and I was literally shouthing 'yes!' when she called Calloway a twit. Score one for Alyssa for doing that. This original character totally rocks. I am so deeply impressed with her. Now you have to eventually get Willy to come around. Right now, he needs to despense with the attitude. They really need each other right now. There is only one problem place: 'She opted out of driving away, and instead began wandered aimlessly, much as she had when she’d ended up at Bill’s shop.' 'Wandered' should probably be 'wandering'. Otherwise, this is so totally flawless. I'm looking forward to more, but you already know that. :) Cheers! ~Yva
Lamminator 2008-05-15 ch 19,	abuseI love the wicked quick updates! Keep it up! Good for Alyssa to tell Shay where to shove the shop. And to Calloway for that matter. Now it seems she has something to get him with...whatever it is. Keep up the writing. Until your next update: ROCK ON! P.S.--I can't remember if I'd reviewed this fict before. If I haven't, I've been meaning to for a while and appologise for not doing it sooner. If I have, sweet! have another review!
win-chun90 2008-05-14 ch 18,	abuseCheers indeed! Another great chapter as always, Can't wait for the next one.
iCraft 2008-05-13 ch 18,	abuseAww I'm so glad her parents made her see reason. :) And I'm a little excited to see how she deals with the sneaky-snake Calloway. And I will definitely be at your wedding in spirit, spiritually eating cake, throwing confetti and what-not. I'll even make a cheesy spirit-speech or a spirit toast if you want. :D I wish scenes like that happened more between my parents and I. We always seem to be going in different directions. And I'm most assuredly looking forward to more Wonka/Alyssa fluff. I love fluff. Especially the downy soft kind. :D The kind that you can float around on, like little angels. Kinda reminds me of a like from The Great Gatsby, something about putting someone in a little pink cloud and pushing them around. Yeah, I definitely love that kind of fluff... Man I'm a rambler... Well, here's to sneaky snakes getting what they deserve, and to being pushed around in little pink clouds. cyber toast of sorts And here's another smiley for good luck. :D
Yva J. 2008-05-12 ch 18,	abuseThat was a great chapter. Thanks too for the shout out. :) I loved the scene between Alyssa and her parents, I think that it was about time someone tried to remind her of her ethics. Willy tried, but he wasn't objective enough...her parents were. I think you made a great point with this in that Alyssa did sort of toss her ethics to the wind for the sake of business, and her parents were smart enough to tell her that that was what she was doing. You were also quite right in your author's notes about people trying to contend with these sorts of issues and how there are too few families that ever do try and get involved in other people's situations. I also enjoyed the evolution of Willy's contract in the flashback...that was an efficient bit, and it works. Oh and 'memo bis punitor delicatum' actually means (according to the copy of the script I found somewhere online) 'I remember the spoiled punisher twice'. Typical Wonka...but she's right, it does sound good. ;) My husband took Latin in school and he said that it as a bunch of hogwash...so I'm inclined to think the translation is rather close. Otherwise, just keep on trucking, this story is really good, and it deserves far more reviews than it's gotten. I'll try and give another shout out about it when I update. I just love this one! Wonderful. Hope finals didn't whoop up on you too terribly much. ~Yva

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