bit feral there with the clothes dont you think?

You might want to be a tad more tactful in picking some of your descriptions. I'm thinking in particular of the phrase "welcome rapist". I hardly think that rape is ever something that's welcome. That as the strong potential to take people the wrong way, you know what I mean?

Other than that, it wasn't a bad attempt. Some grammar and spelling could use a little proofreading. But word choice is imperative to a smoothly-reading fic. Try experimenting with /other/ euphemisms, and you'll bring a lot of potential up to a first-rate slashy ficlet.

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i am a harry/darco hard core shipper and this is such a graphic story ... I LOVE IT

Hey, I am a fan of the whole Harry and Draco scene since bith hott and both .. well hott... So in all fairness You can't really take my word for it but I really liked your story.. Good .. Good... Hott... Good... and all that fun stuff

Very good! Amazing descriptions, I could see it happening before me... whether I wanted to or not... but believe me, I wanted it!!

Okay, the only thing is Harry is most definitely not a Muggleborn. He's half-blood.

Otherwise really good!! :)