Sorry for being so critical... There are so many sweet things about your story, but it is powerfully flawed... Lorelai & Luke have become PARENTS to a very real child. They are people who are old enough, wise enough, and loving enough to behave VERY differently than you've written here... I can reasonably see plenty of the angst that you've written here, but, for example, there is NO WAY in heck Luke would have left after seeing his child for the first time, much less multiple times... And for GOOD? No way. There is nothing in the world like parenthood. Every parent but the most self-centered and immature feels it powerfully. And the characters that you're working with have already been developed to have so much more character than you've allowed them to have. This story could have been confusing, and messy, and angsty, and sweet while still allowing the characters to be themselves... This was NOT Luke and Lorelai. It was a couple of people who had no clue what parenthood is... I'm surprised. Regardless of your age, whatever it is, many facets of your writing indicate a maturity that I would expect to understand this... I suspect you had a idea of what you wanted your story to do, but didn't think it through... Do yourself a favor. Think carefully about what your writing is saying about your characters. Does it all fit?? Your writing deserves it.

Lovely story. But what on earth makes you think Lorelai wouldn't nurse her baby? I find the bottle-feeding by a loving, intelligent woman in this day-and-age awfully hard to believe...

Excellent story~ I know its been like half a year since you wrote this, but have you written a sequel? Let me know! Great job!

i love it!!i completly and totally love it!!it's sad but it's exellent!!

what a wonderful story...and creative idea. i saw that you have the sequal and that makes me happy (: it would have been sad if it ended here. anyway...keep up the good work!

ohh i just saw that their is a sequal!! Yay! i'm going to read it now!! Thanks so much. Your so freakin talented.

I just came across this story a few hours ago and i just finsihed reading it. It was amazing. Written beuatifully as well. I wish we could have gotten more after Lorelai and Luke kissed. It would be nice to have a sequal to this story to see him with his son etc. But anways great story...I really really enjoyed reading it!

This story was so good! I loved the way you got into the characters' heads and how you made everything work out in the end. I was, however, disapointed that you didn't include more Emily and Richard. It would have been interesting to see how they actually reacted to meeting their grandson and whether it mattered in the end, that he was Luke's. Please write a sequel!

I loved your story. I hope you either continue it or write a sequal.

Wow, I just realized that I never reviewed your last chapter.
I`m also one of theese who would have wished for Luke to hold his son. He was longing for it in one chapter and now we didn´t get to read it. It would have sparked the end a lot, because I think something is missing. I felt like "Huh, that´s the end? We read this incredible sad story, hoping all the time for a very happy ending, and that´s it?!" I have to say that I was a bit disappointed. Just for the end, not for the whole storym because it´s a really good one. Maybe you can start your sequel (if you write one) right were you left and show us what we wanted to read?!
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hey, batman... it's pixie. i finally finished reading your story, and it's better than i thought it would b... lol, jk. i luv the ending, but like you said, i wish he had held jake... if ur writing a sequel, plz let me know the title because i'd luv to read it!

*~pixy~*

i realized today, when i found the review for chapter 10 saved on my computer, that even though i reviewed chapters 11 and 12, i had never posted my chapter 10 review, so here it is!!

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Oh dang. I am very sad that this is the next to last chapter. I am a fan of the word redundant. I really hope you post more to this story soon b/c I really cannot wait to see what Luke went to do! Great chapter by the way, even if it took a while for you to post it!!

Sorrie I don't review until now, but I haven't been onine much. I loved the reply you send me last time, with all the rambling!! I love rambling! I hope your tests went okay, even if you found out last minute!! I guess the big benefit of being a trainee is that you don't have test anymore. If I'm right I don't have one anymore, unless I decide to do something else after I graduate. All I have to do is finish my two internships, the first one in about 6 weeks, write a few papers and write my term paper next year, while following 2 or 3 courses where all you have to do is write papers too!! I find myself very lucky :D And the more you proofread your story, the better it is. I believe it's better to update a day later when you got out all (or most of) the errors, than updating immediately when you did not have the change to proofread your own stuff and have a lot of annoying errors in them. So, then the chapter, because talkig about rambling, I wrote a lot without saying a single thing about it :D I'm so glad that they finally worked it out. Although, of course, I'm really sad the story is over!! I loved reading it, every chapter. I hope that after you finish your finals, you'll start a sequel, because there are many things I still want to know. Like the sex of the baby, how things will be for Luke and Lorelai after their reconsiliation and stuff like that. For now, great job and I had the best time reading this story!! I'm looking forward to more stories from your side!

Yay Ducky! *throws streamers* I am gonna call you Duckers instead of ducky (Duckers sounds DIRTY! and reminds me of pudding) ok Yay Duckers! he he!

Perfect ending! I loved it! Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please write a sequel! *tear* so sad to see it end!~JavaJunkie22