Great story. Intricate descriptions and light to details. I like how you make an effort to lay out the setting, the scenery, and the situation first before going into the meat of the story. Although it is what most stories should begin with, a lot of fics on this site doesn't or didn't do a good enough job to coax the reader into the story. I can practically picture myself in Sakura or Kakashi's situation with your details of the senses.

I like chapter 12, by the way. It struck a cord. I thought it was told told so well. The exploration of Sakura's inner mind is not only important to the story, but very intriguing as the reader anticipate Sakura's reaction.

I love the humor. Some exchanges by the characters made me laugh like crazy. I love the part when Sakura said "you're hot" with a worried tone to Kakashi, and he was like "what?!" And the "let me check you out." LOL. Poor Kakashi, his mind must have been on haywire then.
Also when Naruto thought Pukkun was Sakura because of her smell, then denied he thought that...then looking around to see if anyone else thought the same. LOL, OMG, that was so funny! So adorable.

I found this fic different in that it did not jump to a WAFF every other scene, and the male lead was not predatory on the heroine, like many other romance fanfics are. They're both very in character. (and you have my highest praise on that difficult feat) And you know that by separating them, it only makes Sakura and Kakashi (and the readers, of course) to long to be together more. Reverse psychology! Great.

I liked how you developed the plot too, how you made one event leading to another, and how you nurture the two's feelings for each other. Their thought processes are amazingly relatable and realistic.

O, you're so evil, leading us on. Through whole story I've been thinking "Kiss, kiss, kiss, kiss!" And really looked forward to the contact of their lips. Mou! Come on! I'm waiting...so don't abandon this story because that's too cruel on us readers who had traveled this far with Sakura and Kakashi. I will wait with hope that you will decide to come back to this story and finish it. Then till next time.

I'm very sorry to see that this story has been abandoned so close to its conclusion.

Reviewing an abandoned story may seem odd, but I feel you still deserve feedback for your efforts.

This is one of the more original and well-crafted plots out there. I haven't read anything quite like it, and I've read a ** lot of fanfiction. Novelty in itself is a novelty these days, so it's worthy of comment.

I like the progression of Sakura and Kakashi's relationship because it's not like they suddenly find each other hot and have to simply get over the student-teacher issue in their own minds. That ** is lame and boring. Yours is a more natural progression because they spend a lot of time together, relying only on each other. Three months isn't that long, though, and I thought the leap was a little bit fast, but mostly what I appreciated is the fact that neither would acknowledge it in their minds and it took a grave situation on both parts to aid the realisation. The Kakashi-clone kissing scene was great as well. They ALMOST made great progress, but then ... To be honest, their relationship isn't the most realistic dynamic, but I've seen a lot worse in that regard.

What is most unique about this story is that it ACTUALLY managed to shock me. That hasn't happened in forever. When Kakashi "died" I literally ** gasped out loud. I knew he had to pull some crazy zombie ** or something, but I really didn't see the kamikaze scroll coming. You've managed to weave a suspenseful tale where all the pieces slowly come together. It's hard to do and I commend you for it.

I also want to mention the action, since your author's notes expressed some trepidation. I happen to love your action writing style. Too many people either skip it entirely, try to make it just like the anime and detail every single action, or make it overly emotional. The reality is that it's not anime and written word isn't a medium that lends itself easily to ninja fights, but neither are ninja fights usually angst-ridden battle sagas. You find what is, in my opinion, a workable balance of those extremes. Your battle scenes were enjoyable to read and I really appreciate that.


I'd love it if you eventually returned to this story, but I certainly understand writing yourself into a wall and lacking inspiration. It's especially hard when it's fanfiction and doesn't feel like "real" writing.

In the end, I hope you gained what you hoped to out of this endeavour and continue writing in whatever way you please. Naruto or not, fanfiction or not, you have something real underneath. Not many of the "authors" on here can say the same.

Wow, that was a definite twist. Itachi huh? That's crazy. Definitely didnt expect that. It's too bad that you stopped the story. I'm sure it would've ended really good

Awsome
Awsomee
Awsome!
This really rocks!
greaat job.

Love Q.

Wow! What a terrible spot to end it! I'm crushed that you seemed to have abandoned this, but I have enjoyed these 19 chapters. Itachi though? Itachi? Please don't leave it here!

Ah, I'm so sad you abandoned this.

You hurt me so, such a great story. If only, if only.

...But I understand.

:)

This story seems amazing! Really a great start, I can't wait to finish reading what you have done.

I really hope you'll update the story soon, because I'm telling you...it's awesome and it will be a shame to have it unfinished.

woow realy I mean REALY good fic! yoou have to continu this, you have to, it's just mean to leave us to our imaginagion at this point in the fic

it is good al of your scenes were...justt perfect!
pleasecontinu this fic

oh come on!! you can't leave it right here! its like the climax of the story! oh well... maybe your going to change you mind on this story later on when you extremely bored...

Oh.
My.
GOD.

Okay, just started this today, and I'm enraptured. I love the length, the detail, and yes, even your fighting scenes aren't bad.

KAKASHI! NARUTO! PERVY SAGE! HELP HER!

I love you. I love you almost as much as I love Kakashi. May you live forever in undenying happiness!

Bella
!Your biggest fan!

oi! keep writing! keep writing! its so good! but I'm kinda confused. so it wasn't sasuke who was talking to her and was behind her, but itachi? then wat happened to sasuke? not that i care cause no offense but I hate him so he should go die... LOL. please keep writing!
:D

SS

...are my eyes deceiving me, or does the summary say this story is ABANDONED?

-scans it over again to make sure-

WHY?! Oh please don't! This is SO well written too! It'd be such a shame! ;o; Please let this be some cruel April Fool's joke.

Now I'm never going to know what happens next. Damn.

I love this fic!
I couldn't believe you had killed off kakashi, it freaked me out a whole lot, but I love how you made everything work. Keep up the good work and keep writing fanfiction because you are amazing.

LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE!