I read some of your works a long time ago (The Perish Flower & Ebb and Flow), and didn't ever review because I was quite lame, apparently. Anyway, you are one of my favorite writers on this site. And that is saying a lot, because there are quite a few great writers I've come across over the years. So when I saw I got a review from you I was really excited, and when I saw what you wrote, extremely flattered.

Anyway, onto the story at hand. I am currently writing two stories where Cliff is the main character (well I know you know of one of them), and DAMN, I don't think I could do it this well. The style you use is so... perfect. (That's the only word that comes to mind.) It is choppy but I can hear it in my head very well and think it gives a mood to the story that descriptive words could not do alone.

So yeah, I know you haven't written this in years (I like that the last update was 6/6/06, haha), but I hope someday that you find inspiration to finish it. I know a lot changes over five and a half years, but since I know you are still lurking around the site, maybe you will write again. I LOVED The Perish Flower and Ebb & Flow, by the way. Great stories by a phenomenal writer.

Wow...I'd think that after a year you'd at least update once...But who am I to judge? I don't even have an account! (Not that it's my fault...I don't have E-mail v.v)

This is Great! Nobody I've seen so far besides you has multiple writing styles! It is AWESOME!1!

Puh-leease update. I hate starting to read fanfics that no one updates.

Gamerzgal

This is good...really good...UPDATE! We need to know what happens!

This is a very unusual story for you. For starters, it's unlike you to take a male protagonist... Not that you are any less of a writer than you usually are, but you seem a bit out of sorts here.

It's a very good premise, that's for sure. But I can't help wandering if you, personally, are losing interest in the story.

Please don't; this could be a great fic if you keep up at it!

Now, as for some actual feedback... I love the religious 'spin' you're taking with this tale. Instinctively, that brings to my mind a very stark, lonely sort of mood which is so, so... right for Cliff. It also has a very dry voice, and that, too, works for your take on Cliff. But that's a double edged sword at times, as it's not your most compelling writing style.

I'm not going to make any opinions on the actual plot until I finish your third chapter, but I do want to point out that you're on to something unique here. This is a Cliff I've never read before, and seeing what makes him tick could be interesting.

:'( very sad...poor Cliff...HE'S MINE! *Grabs him and runs off* sorry. Good job! keep it up! i could never make a story like this! (thats a complement!) .- *faves to favorite story*

Wow, I didn't expect to see this fic updated. O.o

But that's good, I'm glad you're still continuing it. Yay! -

Wow, this is really good. Cliff needs love, you know that? Nice work.

The first thing I noticed about this piece is that the style of writing is so simplistic. Sometimes the sentences just consist of two or three words. At first, that bothered me - but as I got more into it, I began to see the character that was emerging behind them. Cliff is simple, yet so multifaceted. Quiet, and yet there are so many things bouncing around in his head. Quite the complex character. I love it.

This is great so far. I'm eager to continue reading, and to see what this crime is that Cliff is so ashamed of. Please continue!

Lyndsey

If you do not finish this, I will hurt you!

Anyways, sorry I tend to get SLIGHTLY violent when I like a story and the author wants to stop it. I think this is awesome, so please update it!

This is great.I love Cliff,hes so cute and innocent.Please update soon before we all go insane!

Wow. This is actually pretty good. :D Thumbs up dood. I like it. I love harvest moon. What harvest moon is it based upon? Please tell! P:

Very nice, and I'm glad you finally updated!

Yah, update! :D I think you should continue, at least tell us what he did, since right now the story's kind of hovering on his problem, act, crime etc. Well, one thing's for sure, your writting is great, a little too...I don't know how to put it really, a little too...''Fancy''...Or ''deepy wordy''(lol...) for me at times, but it adds emotions to the story, so it's all good. Keep at it!

P.S. Anyone mind telling me what a soul is? And a clear explanation would be nice...Not some blurry imagery please.

What... what... WHY! Why didn't you ever continue with this. I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HE DID! PLease update... please!

Oh. Christian content in the POV of Cliff? Hot dang, I'm with you for the long run with this one!

Haha, all jest aside: This looks good thus far. It's a little too short to give a full critique, but from the little I do have, I can say that it is certainly very well written. Can't wait to see what you come up with for the next chapter.

Lyndsey