Aw I loved it

Poor Lily, poor Severus. Good story. I like that they both knew that "Mudblood" was a warning not an insult.

Wow. Excellent!

great story brilliant ending (that last line)

Excellent story! The best Lily/Snape I have ever read. You are a talented writer.

Of course this is will be Canon in book seven... ;o)

Just wish to briefly point out that you put Slughard, not Slughorn by mistake. Otherwise a tasty cookie!

That was very sweet :-)

Wow. This is really good. I love the conversation that Severus and Lily have and the way that you portray their realtionship. It was really good, and so sad to read, knowing that this was the last time they would see each other...

Marvelous story, and the way it could so easily have happened. Please write more.

Interesting take on events. I can't help, though, to be less than impressed that Severus would admit that 'oh yes, I'd give up the Longbottoms and any one else, but since it was you I'm sorry," and that would be enough to make Lily forgive him. Somewhat oversimplified, but I've always thought that doing right by someone for whom affection is felt is not enough to redeem anyone who would otherwise feel no compunction against betraying everyone else.

Really well done. This is perfect.

We still don't know when or why Snape became a Death Eater. Definitely before the prophecy, according to Dumbledore in HBP but the rest of his explanation is more ambiguous. Snape dealt with the prophecy as "his master" instructed him, but was Dumbledore perhaps already Snape's master by then? In which case, was he the one who compassed the Potter's death by his hubris and complacency?

Very good indeed. You've found a way to write a story that's canon compatible and fits your vision of Snape in the Shakedown series. Lovely.

'Something composed of ice splintered in her belly and the pieces lodged around her heart.' I love that line!

Once I got my mind wrapped around a Snape in hippy attire - I think that look would work for him!;-)

Very much enjoyed this filling in of blank spots in canon and backstory. Wonderfully written.

Feeling he was being 'a bit harsh' re: Wormtail - ouch.

The last sentence is a heartbreaker, of course.

that was fantastic! uv tied ur own in very well with the actual story, its an extremely skillfull thing 2 b able to do. its also written well, i like ur style. i could sit here all day commenting on everything that i like but that would b stupid so I'll just say that i think its pretty much near perfect, as far as fanfics go. I applaud u!:)