love it and can totally see it

wow
I love when people let me bully them
but I agree with what you said I guess as Temari
don't know if that makes sense but anyway, yeah, he's not weak
and I think it's good that she pushes him to see that
wish I could do that well cuz I have some friends that are like, a pain like that
not a pain you know but I know they can do better and I'd like to see them do better

nicely written good job

nice story. You could continue it.

Yeah!
go temari fierceness,
and go shikamaru believing in her!
yeah!

'please, keep writing!'

Aha! Nice ending.

I like this story, it really flows well. Not to mention it's really sweet. I like how you interpret their characters too, they're two of my favorites and I like what you did with them.

so sweet! I like it a lot! And I love that couple, because shikamaru is so cute and temari...well, temari too. They're my favourite characters and I think that you have done it very well, you haven't changed their personality. You've got talent!

"A man that she can take home to Gaara and Kankuro and say, 'He is the one I have chosen. Him and no one else'"

That's my fave line from there. I liked how you poignantly showed Temari's character; her unwavering faith resembles Anna's from SK. Anyhow, I really like how you balanced explicitness with subtlety throughout this short piece. You told just enough and gives this a mature feel.

Nice.

Also the background of this has the potential to become a longer, multichaptered story. Oh yeah, I should be the last to point that out to you since my punctuation is still off but yours is, too. Just felt like mentioning it. More ShikaxTema for the world!

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