I enjoyed reading this wonderful piece of poetry. It brought back thoughts of my childhood when this was such a great game to pass the time away. Thanks for the memories!!

Nice poem thingy *lol* Liked reading it. Umm...sorry, I'm not sure what to right after that. I hope it's ok if I just submit it now, which I will!

I appreciate your semi-accurate iambic meter.

This really spoke to me. I'm serious its beautiful.

I LOVE YOU! That's great. It's good poetry too. Just writing fanfiction about pong is funny enough. Congrats.

Nice one. It adds such depth to the world of Pong.

...um...wow...a poem about a pong... interesting

who knew one could write such deep things about pong.
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pong is amazing

and so are you

Pretty cool!
I never would've thought to write such a serious poem about pong. I never would write poetry for fun, anyway. W/e. Your poem is very eloquent!

I showed this too a friend of mine, and she said you should put your Literary talent to work doing something usefull. I thought it was really good though. It amazes me how someone can take something Like pong and write something like this.

Once again, you've done it. Your skill seems strong in the ability to make the inane seem glorious, the mindless entertainment object seem something worthy of a 3-hour adaptation by Peter Jackson, nay, something even epic. It's funny how you made the paddles into tireless warriors fighting against a never-ending onslaught posed by a malicious orb; it makes the whole thing seem very noble, in a way.

"Brilliance and shadow" was my favorite line, because it actually fleshes out the "warriors" and the "pale orb" as living in a living, breathing world. A 2-dimensional world, but if you've ever read Flatland, you'd know that dimension is merely the stage upon which greatness performs. This is your dimension, my friend. Nicely done.

-T.J.

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why would you write a pong poem

Very good. I didn't know that there were Pong fics until now, and it slightly worried me. But if they're all like this, I'm not AS worried. This is actually quite good, true to Shakespearian sonnet form. You stayed well with the iambic pentameter until the very last line, that only has 9 syllables. But, other than that, this is very good. I never thought of Pong in that sort of epic way. Now, every time I play pong, this'll always stay in my mind. Kudos.

~Samdum~

sorry for may bad English I'm French !
Excelent ! I'd never imagine Pong in that way ! Ah, the Pong fictions are among the best ones ! And THIS one is excellent as I say... it's err... 'poetic' if I can say !^^

Vixen Rouge

Wow, this is a cool poem/sonet/thingy. Who knew pong could be prtrayed so elegently?