|Reviews for Lucius' Lost Daughter|
| Viiraruu 12/21/05 . chapter 1
please update i want to know what happens next!
| silent tears not withheld 12/3/05 . chapter 1
i like... write more...this will prove to be interesting. And maybe you can help me with my Fanfic. I was writing a story where the Malfoy's had a daughter,but they didnt give her up for adoption.
| Debbie 12/3/05 . chapter 1
Wow. That's rather un-Voldie-like. I mean, I always thought he had red eyes. And no nose. Or hair.
Of course, the teachers couldn't care less whether their students fell asleep in class. Man, i wish mine were like that.
Emilie- not spelled the same as Emily, because she's sooper speshul.
Voldie thinks Millie has a "lovely name"? *stares*
And somehow, Voldie isn't a spirit. This means that it is past Harry's fourth year. What did Lucky do this time, procreate with a teenager?
"You smile just like your father"- really creepily? 'Cuz that's the only way I can imagine Lucky smiling.
Voldie didn't kill the muggles. 0.o;;. If it really was Lucius Malfoy's daughter, why not kill the freaks that 'perverted' her with their muggleness, obliviate the chit, and replace her memories with ones that he could choose?
"I could feel how powerful he is just by standing near him. It would probably be best just to obey him so I won't end up dying . I sigh and started to throw random clothes into a bag. Just what is going on here?"
Switching tenses, check. ESP, check. Sooper-spechul deduction powers, check. Not stopping to ask whether or not he was some sort of perverted rapist who wanted to abduct her, have his way with her, and then murder her? Check.
This is better than some other Mary-Sues I've read before. With a little bit of work (and a tad of in- character- ness) this could be really, really good.