“So why was one of them in your bedroom? And what's all that blue stuff?” Marisa eyed her friend. “You aren't ... you know ...” She laughed, Marisa always had a one track mind, even now!

Oh, you bad, you bad, gal!! (burst out laughing, wagging her finger at the author)

“You can't stay here.” “Get some sleep, love” “See you tomorrow!”
I love the way you make the Elder and the protagonist communicate with each other. The choice of the recordings really made me smile, after those horrible events in the hunt. It served the story right - to change the mood from gruesome to lighter now. It also evoked more sympathy for the female character (I didn't like her much, cause she was so ruthless and brutal when killing this poor human prey).
So far, I understand that the mysterious predator that keeps paying visits to her is her former instructor, and a female, yes? Too bad, I thought it would be a male - I am always for romance among species ;-)

Wow. You have built the dramatics very well, the reader cannot but laugh and cry with the protagonist and when you reach the point where Marisa dies, the story gains that passionate, intimate dimension that kept me glued to the monitor. The end solution is so right and expected, yet lamentable. This is the circle of life, but in this case we could call it as well the circle of death. I guess trophies like this are what makes hunting meaningful. Thanks for writing!

This is really cool so far!

For those of you in need of translation of the slightly obscure last chapter, Cally lost and Marisa never died.

Oh, and for wiping out the main character, who I liked far more than any of the others in the story, you've entered my IOS (infect on sight) list... ;)

Great story, but I really don't understand the last chapter. Maybe that's the way it's supposed to be or I missed something in the story.

Oh, you are evil. Now, you definitely need to do a sequel.

And the challenge begins...

Can't wait for your sequel, as this fiction is Grade A+ in my books.

Oh, you better not keep us waiting too long. Cliff hangers are what make me keep coming back to this site every half hour while I'm SUPPOSED to be working on my story.

Hm, what could this mean? The ideas are swimming around in my head.

I wanna know what happens. And this is why I hated Christmas. All that anticipation is going to give me an ulcer.

An awesome, F-ing story. One of the best I've seen in the AvP section.

Great Job, keep it up!

Liked the new chapters.

And here I was worried that you wouldn't update. Wonderful work. Keep it up.

Great story.

i have read all of the story so far i think it is exerllent. But there is on thing that co fuses me is when did she first meet predators (excluding the one that is traning her or is he the only one) and first make a kill.

threw a rock at its head!? lol
classic