Nice piece, I like!

that was so cool! i've found it hard 2 find good believable DA fics, looks like I've finally found one

Good stuff...very good.

Rockin'! write some more it was really good.

Great story! It made me feel a whole lot better! :)

Very nice; I really enjoyed it! Keep up the great work!

You've done a great job revealing Logan and Max's emotions as they deal with the photos. The hurt and betrayal Max felt is especially strong. The offer to return the dress is so true to Max. It is especially effective because it contrasts the happiness of the moment when Logan bought it for her and told her she deserved it to Logan's reaction to the photos which left her feeling totally betrayed. The ending was heartwrenching but also beautiful. You did a wonderful job portraying Max's fear of the violence that might be in her. You are a wonderful writer. Can't wait for more posts.

This is really good! Is there more to come! Please?

Hey! For your first fanfic, I say hooray! Grammar and paragraph structure are great, and the characterizations are fairly accurate- I think you should feel pretty confident! That said, I specifically liked some of the littler moments that told the reader how they are feeling: "Far away from the home it was becoming" and "no, that was not her heart breaking."

Beautiful

EXCELLENT! Keep it up and post more!