I really think you should continue this story, it's really intersting.

I see you haven't updated this in quite a while, which makes me sad. It's a really good story, and you write it very well.

Well, this story quite good so far. I am looking forward to future chapters.

Ack! I see you haven't updated in a VERY long time. I hope it's nothing more than bad timing and not that you've stopped working on this fic. You truly have something going here and I would hate to see it sit uncompleted. Not only that you have me hooked!

Argh! Now I want more!

Interesting choices you've made on the flashbacks to the past. They really do a good job of setting the Exile up with a personality, something she lacks in the game. I do hope you're continuing this fict!

I found this story on Pris's C2 community. I don't read very much kotor fanfiction anymore, or any fanfiction really, but this drew me in, which is not easy to do because I am easily distracted. Well done!

I always wondered if someone could tackle the kotor2 mess of a storyline and make some sense of it and I really think you've done a great job setting it up so far. I love that Del is scarred and imperfect, she reminds me of Radley's main villian a little, or something out of William Gibson. This is all good. Very good.

And I really like non-fluffy Atton. A ton.

I think there's a place in the chapter before this one where your pov slips -- it's Del's and you have Atton making a few observations -- but that's seriously a minor nit. Your writing's strong enough that it didn't bug me.

WOW... THIS REALLY SUCKED!

This is such an amazing story. I have to say it's one of the best written. (Especially on here) Your characterizations are unique yet stay true to the game. And thankfully, I'm not 3-4 years to late, since I an see your still updating! :P Looking forward to another beautifully written chapter!

It's certainly wonderful to see Del and crew after such a long hiatus, and trials on your part that would match theirs.

The exchange between Del and Kreia is an excellent way to begin to establish the rapport that had kind of faded or not been established yet.

The "act of rebellion" on Atton's part is also quite fitting. The whole bit about the eye brings chuckles and reminds us of who this Del character is.

Like Trillian, I felt that something was missing from this chapter. It's just does not have the same deadly sharp edge found in other chapters. It's still good, mind you... and those other chapters put the bar so high it must be incredibly hard to reach it every time. Especially given the laptop, and other stuff...

Keep up the good work!

BaM

Yay for updates!

Excellently crafted, as always. The progression of the story is well-rendered and the flashbacks keep any potential 'walk-through' side-effects at bay. It's a great read and a refreshing take on this tale.

However, this chapter seemed different than previous efforts. It seemed to me that there was something missing, some spark of clarity and sharpness that the other chapters had in spades, but it is only slightly present in this one. Not a lot, mind you. You're absolutely a master at this writing stuff and should make a million bucks with some original work if you had a mind to, imo, but there just seemed to be a tad more telling and not showing in this one.

On the other hand, I've already fallen in lust with your Revan. The bare description left SO much to the imagination...I immediately started imagining dark-skinned, beaded and braided, Rasta!Revan with light eyes and reeking of evil/charisma. Yum.

And I thought this line was interesting: “There are two kinds of soldiers in this war, Katya: those whose loyalty is absolute, and those who are expendable.”

To me, it seems like the expendable ones, to the Sith, are those that ARE one hundred percent loyal. They're the poor schlubs who blindly go to the front lines and are first to get wasted. But it's a fantastic insight into a character you only barely reveal.

And, as always, your ability to say and describe a lot with a few, well-chosen words is enviable.

Overall, wonderful stuff and I can't wait to see how the next chapters (both past and present) unfold.

Fantastic! I love Del's rules at the end. I especially love Atton's reaction to her missing eye.

~At this point, Del gave Atton a significant look. All at once, he realized that her eye—the one she couldn’t seem to stop touching and rubbing—was nothing more than an empty socket. He could not prevent the grimace that followed, anymore than he could resist the question he blurted out. “Where the hell is your other eye?”

“Rule three: no stupid questions.”

:) That's just awesome!

Just discovered your story... It's superb! It's a bit too twisted for fluffy bunny me to be entirely comfortable with it, but your style is excellent! Keep it coming!

Jen wuvs you!

Erm, I'm not really so scary. I'm having a bad day at work (and it's only 10am), and I saw your update in my email and I went "omg yay my day just got a lot brighter!!".

Your Revan gives me goosebumps but in a good way. He's quite...dark, for lack of better word, but you can feel he's still more determined than evil. At this stage at least. The way that he wants to beat the Mandalorians at their own game, the thin spoon and bone marrow scene--they all speak his character so well. I also loved the way you were so thrifty with his physical description so even though he's standing right before us he's still more a mystery.

Malak has the quote of the chapter--"There are two kinds of soldiers in this war, Katya: those whose loyalty is absolute, and those who are expendable." I think it explains his character so well, even later in K1. He's still playing by these rules while I think the 'canon LSM Revan' starts to understand a different set of rules.

I hope you'll write more on these two characters in flashbacks and what not.

I suppose Katya could have foreseen, if only a little, that they'd be going dark, but that she's either powerless or unwilling to try and intervene...I might be thinking into it too much, but I think that's a scar that she wants to carry with her too.

Excellent, as usual. Particularly loved the Malak and Revan bits. And so much yay for Sion!

Heh, you really do get the feeling that Bao is getting swept along by the exile - and she's like this big brutal force of nature that he can't really resist.

I love the awkwardness to their relationship, their hesitant attempts to reach out to each other that are kind of doomed to fail because she won't open up completely and still remains rather aloof.

I also really appreciate the fact that you don't shy away from showing the action scenes (which is something I'm guilty of glossing over in my own stuff). It's kind of annoying as a reader to read a big buildup to a battle and then have the writer dodge around it. You don't do that here - instead go through it in all of it's glorious, brutal detail.

Once again, lovely work, and I really do hope that you eventually continue this.