Very good. I loved the way you have the whispers as his own mind. Describing the team of Parker, and her goons, are great. Nice job.

I liked it, there were a couple typos, and parts where I think I'd have liked it fleshed out a little more, but I thought it was quite exhilarating. :)

Hi charro,

Very nice Job!! Very vivid interpretation of Jarod's escape. Looking forward to reading more or your work.
Mercy

Gosh! This was great. I felt like I was the one running while reading your fic. My heart was palpitating. What? No part 2? Great story!