This is fantastic. Great job. :]

nice description

Err ... not bad. Although I am a fan of talking. But good effort.

I like it...even for a sex story. Very discrptive, and the title pretty much sums it up. Over all...

good job! kudos!

this is all summed up into one word.

Beautiful.

I'm glad you wrote this.

I think that this new approach is really rather innovative. Yet, like the reviewers before me, it seems to lack a little something and I think it's probably because no names were mentioned or anything. Not that it really detracts from it or anything. Other than that, this was wonderfully written.

You're right, this is a very different style than the ones I had read earlier. It is good, of course, sense all of your writing is, but it's generally a PWP. If that's what you were aiming for, then GREAT, wonderfully done, five stars. If you were going for the whole romance/intimacy thing, then...I don't know, it's missing something.

I, like always, liked it. You're incredably good at discriptions *glares in envy*.

OH THAT WAS SO SWEET THATI DON´T FIND THE RIGHT WORDS TO TELL YOU HOW A GOOD WRITER YOU ARE, SO ROMANTIC AH¡ KEEP GOING LIKE THAT.

This is nice. This is good quality erotica. It could be even better if you added some human and personal touch to it. I know that this is a different style you are trying, but reading this, you wouldn't be able to place it in any particular fanfiction category. You might even want to mention something about hair, skin or eye color to show which two people you are writing about. Your writing shows real potential. Keep up the good work.

I love it.

If it was supposed to be poetic, then it was great.

VERY impressed!
I like the "new approach" and the different writing styles and technique. Very romantic and mysterious.
Details were not too explicit or crude to take away from the drama and beauty of your piece of work.
Excellent!

Very nice. You have an interesting approach to writing and its very mysterious and beautiful.

Very descriptive... the detail is great. A little too... well.. for my liking but the details is great.

That was so great! I loved it! It made me get all hot and stuff!
Nice
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