 Ahmar 2005-12-13 . chapter 1Wow, Presley angst. O_o Okay, first off, good start. It's nice to see someone besides JaKal having 'woe is me' moments for once. Grammar's good, for the most part, but you might want to look into a beta. Also, it's rather short, and a little random. It would be nice to see these things elaborated on in a longer fic. |