truly different. was a little bogged down in details but overall good. Darrel

Chapter 4 sweets from Zonko's? Not honeydukes?

loved

i love it but i must work on my essy due moonday i will read the ret soon as i can

I have to agree with other's comments that the Hermione/Harry rape scene was over the top. Hermione raped Harry and wasn't even in the least sorry about it. No one, man or woman, has the right to force sex on someone. In addition, Harry taking the blame because Cho told him to was very odd as well. We know that the Harry in your story takes responsibilty for things that aren't his fault, but this is just too much. Rape is not a story line to be trifled with.

So Ginny attacked Harry with a knife and she gets no punishment? Shouldn't she be expelled? She tried to kill him!

ohmygaed
i love this fic
albit it was really long and took me a week to read.
it was still really good.
and funny at the same time. i loved how you made blasie a girl
lol
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(O.o)
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Good

I'm not trying to sound rude or arrogant, but you really need to work on this story. The plot isn't that bad, but you kill it with poorly written sections, gramatical errors, such as "Too Harry", when it should be "To Harry", and you can tell that it isn't a typo because you've done it multiple times, and things like that. Take a moment, read over your story, and see how it sounds. Also, try getting a beta if you don't have one already because sometimes one writes things that sound perfectly normal to themselves, but to others, they can't make heads or tails of it.

I would like to let you know, yes your stories are different, and while you have alluded that your story came first i am not sure if this is true. Barb's Fiction (see below) was published in May of 2001 while your was published on 12-14-05. I thought you would like to know this...i do like your story and am currently half way through. I will have a completed review posted when i finish.

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WINNER OF THE 2002 GOLDEN QUILL AWARD IN THE ROMANCE CATEGORY! Harry's 5th yr. He gets a snake who has the Sight. Romantic entanglements, Animagus training, house-elf liberation, giants, Snape's Pensieve and more!
Harry Potter - Fiction Rated: M - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 34 - Words: 336,012 - Reviews: 1506 - Updated: 3-17-03 - Published: 5-19-01

Well first off I loved your story. Second its the Patornus Charm not Expecto Patronus. thats how it is said as it is cast. Another thing is that she would be HeadMISTRESS McGonaggle not Headmaster. Other then that It was awsome.

-Kristen-

I really like this story! I was wondering if you were gonna continue it or leave it hanging like it is?

look up Barb

really bad attempt to knock off Barb LPs Psychic Serpant

Thanks Phil, but if you put a link or even F F .ne t(Have to space it apart or it is blanked out) it is blanked out.

And yes the beggining was bad as I was just starting out. Later on and as I wrote more I became a better writer. And I like this part...

"This is has to be the first very well written fic I have read that isn't all chearful and stupid. The fact the whole thing is set in a war isn't ggoing to be all fun and games, Great job on this whole thing."

I read two that were horrible and knew I could write something better and glad to see someone else agrees it is better then most even if the beggining was a little bad. The story you and others talked about, have the exact title? I could just google the title and probably find it.