this story is way too rushed i wish u would of took ur time cause it would've been real good then

i know it has been a while sice you updated but i really like your stories.. so if you could please updatedit i would love you! (N/L)

aw thats so cute! some ppl r 2 hard on ur story, its nice so keep it up!

Oh god. What did the world do to deserve your crappy story being set loose upon it?

Damn, your shit sucks.

HOW DO YOU GET ALL THE REVIEWS? Nice story, keep up the good work. um, just to tell you, maybe you should use quotation marks so I can understand thoughts and what people say, it is confusing.

Lack of quotation marks, lack of commas, lack of description, spelling errors, run-on sentences galore.

Edit. Edit. Beta-read. Beta-read. Repeat.

Nice chapter please continue.

This story is terrible. Here's why:

1. It's acceptable not to use quotation marks when someone is speaking-IF the author is James Joyce, which you are obviously not. Learn how and when to use them; they'll be your best friends.

2. Your grammar is, to put it kindly, awful. Consider a beta reader (or three).

3. Your style of writing is extremely choppy. Try developing and fleshing out the characters a little more, and add more detail to the situations.

4. You don't own Escaflowne.

i like your story but by the way it is written i would say you were young and it takes a little while for me to see when they are talking so could you improve that otherwise i really like your story so keep on writting you will get better soon

Very nice. I love it. A little unclear, but very awe-inspiring. Keep it up.

great story and polt! Great writting too! keep up the great work! update soon!

Nice chapter please continue.

Your stories good but it get's a little hard to understand when you can't under when someone is speaking and when you are narrating. So when someone says something it should look like this: "Hello, how are you this morning?" When you want the other character to give a reply you hit enter and then a tab and responed: "I'm fine. It's nice to see you again." So all together it should be.

"Hello, how are you this morning?"

"I'm fine it's nice to see you again."

"That's good to hear."

You also have a few grammer errors.Instead of 'Van wake up to see that Hitomi...' It should be 'Van woke up to see that Hitomi...' Then, 'Van her her said...' should be Van heard her say...'And so on. If you have a word progarm run it through spell check or try and find a beta reader.

Anyhow this is a nice story and hope you continue. All writing improves with pratice. Good luck.

Ich Leo

Another nice chapter please continue.