Snape? Hot? What realm do you live in?

LOVE IT! A little bit confusing at parts, but still good! Whats gonna happen next? Please finish! Write on!

So far,this story is funny though it seems very unrealistic any girl would go out would Dudley.

Interesting story so far, not an epic tale of conquest and fire. but you've got the personalities down pat and the interactions spot on, even if you like to play with your OC's a little too much.

Keep up the good work.

OK, first off i would like to say that i liked the story. it was good. now for the contrastive criticism part. the writing was good, but there were some part hard to understand. you should try making it a bit more clear when there is a line cut. then there is the matter that this is a harry potter story, now this is just me here but there is not much harry in this, but there is even less of him being a wizard. it was also kind ooc. also i don't know if it is point to the story yet but there is a lot of things in here that i don't really think need to be in the story. it kind if makes a story boring if you bring in new characters that don't do anything or have a plot line in the story. you used a lot of space saying things that i don't know if are so important. it made the story a bit of a drag on. I'm sorry i am not trying to be rude, but the whole point of this is to get better, i am just trying to help a writer that has great taste and style. like i said i do really like the story. i hope you update soon. i want to see where this goes. later dude. ps i hope i didn't offend you.

Your style of combining Dursley's girlfriend and Potter are a very debatable story. Good Luck.

Hey

I actually really like your story!

you kinda thought it all through and you are a marvelous storyteller.

just a little thing: I know my english is dreadful, but the German in this Chapter is also very incorrect. I don't blame you really. A s I said I could'nt write something like that in english XD

hey great story!

but wen u updatin ive been waitin AGES!

lol

WRITE MORE!

LOL. You do know that HP is famouse to her, not just a boy from school?

What does that spell do?

Once again... HARRY HAS A GIRLFRIEND! A WITCH GIRLFRIEND NOT A MUGGLE!

I THOUGHT HE HAD A GIRLFRIEND! ARG! NO!

I love it, but you do know that you do not have to wear spandex for Yoga,right? Also, is Master Snape...well, Snape?

Why don't they have a lock on the bathroom door?