This is excellent, truly excellent.

I like that you included other warrior races comparable to Saiyajin in power, it's all too rare that something like that happens within fanfiction, everyone else seems to have hopped on the 'Saiyajin are unbeatable!' bandwagon, which is really frigging annoying.

I also liked how you had clearly non-evil characters wishing for immortality or variations thereof, something that again people don't often do because of some fool notion that immortality is inherently evil, when it's pretty obviously morally neutral(or even good, in the case of mass-immortality).

Certain things don't match with the show such as Gluu being a super Sayin's equal as well as his power up considering her worked for Frieza. Zuukuuni's jump in power was awsome. I must honestly though this is one of the best DBZ fics I read. It was awesome. 5 out of 5 stars.

Brillant first start. I like the introducion of Gluu. You know they never touched base on that. Small thing that bothers me is Zuukuuni was a Super Sayin but her power was lacking to a true super sayin. I mean Frieza wasted Gluu and a fifth of his true power. Despite that bit of confusion I look forward to reading the rest.

just to tell you i am 13 it's i'm not that good at write stories and its my first so plz chillax plz and like your story lates

Son-Goyin

write more chapters, please!

Cool. That was a cool idea. Good Job

Still working hard I see. The sun shines where you are? Really?

Cool! Just joking. Your story is coming along really well. Can't

wait till you get more of it up to read. Zuukuuni is a really cool

character. I like her.

Okay, i said I wasn't going to go chapter by chapter any more, and this chapter was still very good, but how did the Cell Jr get to New Namek? Got a little bit of a plot hole there. And how did he know the restrictions of the Namekian dragon? (not a negative review, just a little criticsm.) Hum... it didn't show in the last review, but you use the arrow marks... parameters someone told me... your [i]...[/i] command is not working. FYI, they are on the , and . keys. Ja Storm Crow.

Well, You are probably going to get real sick of my reviews real fast if I do this chapter by chapter, but this is actually a good story. You have a good style and these first few chapters flow very well! Actually, this is one of the few good stories I have read in quite a long time and it is refreshing. I can't see why this isn't getting more attention. The only thing i can think of is what I said before about title and summary. Oh and your html coding is wrong use instead of brackets. Ja! Storm Crow

Ahh, there's the little bugger! Once again, very well done. The dialogue as an exposition was excelent. One question (I know, I am picky _) Are you having the Cell Jr have a retractable tail? The images of the Cell Jr.s were miniature models of Perfect Cell who, having already absorbed the androids, had no need to absorbe people through his tail and so it became a little nubb under his wings. Ah well, that is my only little criticsm for this chapter. I thought the characterization was wonderful.

Interesting. A lot of time and planning obviously went into this, and I can see that you have promise as a writer. Your descriptions are excellent and you have made a pretty strong introduction here. Some advice, before I move on, seriously rethink your title and summary. The title doesn't really draw people in and your summary doesn't match what I see here in the slightest. You said it was about a Cell Jr, while this is about one of Furriza's goons revived from namek. BTW I liked that you made the revival true to cannon. All that was believable and well done. I am going to read further of what you have, but I am wondering about the character Zuukuuni. She could easily turn into a Mary Sue if you aren't careful. But, so far she seems good, solid character. I guess I will see.

Of course it does. You're very talented. I enjoyed the story so far.

Can't wait to finish it.

The summery said differnt.