Aw. :C Poor Kakashi...

The thing that caught my eye with this story firsthand (despite the title, which was well chosen - I am a loyal MCR fan :D) was the "Obito's eye always open" thing. It's very different - not often does an author put Kakashi's sharingan into a daily perspective.

Then, Kakashi holding Rin so sensually while saying "I need healing". The pieces don't fit together, but they made this a powerful and interesting part of the story, and made it easier to believe what they did afterwards.

It was confusing as to what happened to Rin - I understand she died, but it leaves the reader with the question of how she died. Sometimes it's good for a story to leave the reader with questions, though. I think this just adds more interest.

It's also a little hard for me to believe that he'd have been with so many women - I can see Kakashi as a pervert and late-night porn reader, but not as one of those guys who finds a hooker every night (exaggeration, but you get my point).

But nevertheless, the thing that I love the most about this story were those last few lines, that not only tied the whole thing together, but really put Kakashi's pain out there and in clear perspective. It's always hard to imagine losing such important people in one's life, and I've never seen any author display it so powerfully. I feel that this is something that needed to be done, for he goes through way more than we as the audience understand and give him credit for. That line "IT'S TOO HEAVY YOU B*STARDS!" was so amazingly and outstandingly powerful, and had such an impact on me as the reader. It was such a perfect and original thing for him to say - well, scream, anyways.

The emotion and choice of words was very well displayed here.

I've fallen in love with this story. It's a very well-written and compelling piece of fanfiction. It's inspired me to continue my own writing. I'm excited to see what else you can do with your talent.

Many, many, many kudos to you! This was a very original story, which is hard to achieve in fanfiction, and in writing in general.

Wonderful.

DismayNight

Ah, angst. And the line about 'no one letting him die', deep AND angsty. I thought it captured a lot of the baggage that Kakashi has but never shows.

Poor Kakashi. It's so sad that Kakashi is always left behind.

( I love your writing.

It is a perfectly done story in it's own way!

Asami

Amazing. Brilliant. Intense.

ah...so pretty. you did an excellent job portraying his inner issues, and i love his angry yell at the end...so dramatic, so perfect, so picturesque...thank you.

Wow. That was a really intense story. You really bring out the pain of Kakashi's descent really well in the way how he just gets sicker and sicker as time goes on, and how the Sharingan keeps torturing him.

God, that's ... GAH! Very well done, some of the lines you have there are great, and the part where Kakashi screamed at the end ("IT'S TOO HEAVY YOU BASTARDS!") -hurts- and it's great.

*goes to re-read again*

i am totally speechless about this work. a piece of art actually. keep up the good work! so depressing though...but i still luv it! keep it up!

That's... that's sad... but good, as always. Keep it up!

I'm reviewing this with out a clue of what to say besides "Wow, Awsome job." Short but sweet and to the point. The ending was perfect. You didn't ramble and you didn't leave out too much. My thanks for a great story and looking forward to more.

Werid, and depressing. and somewhaat sweet

Very good piece!

...wow...I ...well I'm speechless!..that was brilliant!