Reviews for The Seed of Their Beginning
Jen 10/25/07 . chapter 16
I wonder if Peter and his dark side will have to team up to defeat the Pack. Glad to see you continuing this!
Ivy3 10/17/07 . chapter 16
A bit of an evil cliffie, but I'm glad to see you're updating. Good chapter- I hope Kwai Chang comes to try and rescue Peter (maybe even Paul) and that Peter meets the "pack" soon.
Jen 6/23/07 . chapter 15
Hmm...Peter's dark side is starting to get scared. Not a good sign.
allhoneyboo 6/12/07 . chapter 15
Well, I'm intrigued. I hope you continue. I want to see what happens to Peter. Peter and the Wolf. heh.
Ivy3 6/8/07 . chapter 15
Nice to see an update. It's still interesting and going strong, Peter's transformation is intriguing and I hope his dad(s) and Kermit can save him before it's too late.
Jen 5/6/07 . chapter 14
This has been really good so far. It will be interesting to see how Peter resolves the darkness and heightened ablilities within himself. Please continue soon!
Blackstar1979 4/21/07 . chapter 1
I've been a KFTLC fan for years and i had almost forgot how refreshing a good fic could be.
Dane Cross 4/16/07 . chapter 14
Hey, this chapter is good, so I guess that means you need a nap ;p

Anyway, I can how you might think that you were repeating yourself. You took your time to really delve into what Peter and Paul were thinking. I think you needed to give us a look into how they are dealing with the revelation that this "Change" is really happening. This is the first down moment any of them have had to really dwell that this "change" is really happening. It's good to slow down the tempo and do some good character development in between you action sequences. The tempo change will make your upcoming action scenes feel faster and more frenetic. It's good to give the reader a chance to reconnect with your main characters and the drama they are going through. Good job! Can't wait to read more.

By the way, i love that your chapters are lengthy. Thank you for making them that way.
g2fan 4/13/07 . chapter 14
The story is getting even more interesting. Please keep it coming Wendy
Ivy3 4/13/07 . chapter 14
Kwai Chang is back! This is getting more and more interesting, just too bad the updates are long in between.
g2fan 4/12/07 . chapter 13
Hi, Very interesting story. I like it. Hope you update real soon Wedny
danecross 2/15/07 . chapter 13
Thank you for such a luxuriosly long chapter! I needed a fix. So, here are my impressions: I was a little disappointed that I didnt get to read about Kermit's imediate reaction to the glow of Peter's eyes in the last chapter. I understand it's not necesary to the plot and Kermit's such a cool character he probably would have disappointed me anyway by failing to actually react. I really enjoyed the discussion betwen Blaisdale and Kermit after Blaisdale failed at talking to Peter. That was nicely written. I was a little fuzzy about how the talk started though. Between the voice in Peter's head, the cop watching the kid in detention and then Peter jumping into the fray... It just got a little muddled. I think it was throwing in a third party cop perspective that we don't really know. I mean we already don't really know who the voice is, and you are introducing the kid to us which I'll come back to the subject of him. and it's all happening during a very important confrontation that the reader is realy trying to concentrate on. it's just a little to much and the effect is confusing. I found myself more aware of what was going on with this cop I didn't know than the confrontation that was what I really wanted to be savoring. My advice, the way you are trying to introduce this kid, and the action and how Peter has to step in is really good. Don't change any of the sequence of events. But it needs to be someone else, someone who is already in the cast that is watching this kid and revealing him us the reader. It could be Kermit, The captainof the precinct, Blaisedale or that girl that plays Peter's partner.

Now, about the kid and the reveal that the pack really is telepathic and this causing a rift between the killer and his pack mate... You are a genius! I never saw it coming and I'm so excited by the possibilities. The kid in custody is him right? The voice? OH! this is so good the wa you pulld all of that together was poetic! What a payoff. I can't wait to see if I'm right. Please write more ASAP.
Ivy3 2/9/07 . chapter 13
I'm glad you've decided to update, this is a great fic and I can't wait to read more!
danecross 1/12/07 . chapter 1
Hey, I was thinking some more about your story and I have a few more thoughts on your plot. At some point you are going to need to readdress the rift between Peter and his adoptive father. It's got to be eating at Peter that all of his father figures seem to have a tendancey to cut him out of their lives. Heck Cain in on his second go of abandoning Peter. So I was thinking your explosive scene where Peter loses it might be a confrontation between Peter and Blaisdale. It would be a nice way to connect back to this main theme of Peter struggling to deal with his daddy issues. It's also kind of interesting that this evil guy acts like the only guy that is willing to go out of his way to have this sort of "father" influence over Peter. Its an interesting psycological struggle. Peter's childhood desire was to regain the father he lost. He's still trying to have that. He's always struggled from the damage of losing that father figure. Now that he's an adult how horrible would it be to come to terms with the idea that now that someone has come along that really wants the role, the essence of who Peter is cannot allow him to be a son. All his worst fears about himself, all his insecurities are confirmed.

Wow, you have such a great story going. Please upate soon.
Ivy3 12/3/06 . chapter 12
We're getting somewhere and I'm anxiously waiting for Kermit, Peter (and possibly Paul) to solve this. Hope to see more of the wolves as well, see what they're planning and how this new body is connected to Peter, if at all.
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