interesting, it sounds as though there are 50 different plans going on at once. When is everything going to come to life? Will Andros and Ketana ever restore their relationship.

I liked this chapter a lot gave more depth to Dharin's character. Update soon

Interesting story. Sometimes it seems to jump from extreme to extreme and can be a little hard to follow, and your OC is a little too much, but it's still a very interesting read.

I like how you expressed the emotion between Andros and Ketana in this chapter. x3 can't wait for the next installment.

x3 and so the plot thickens . So happy you are writing it again cant wait to see how it progresses .

Great Story

Wow. I didn't think this story was ever going to be updated again. I'm a little confused right now cause it's been a while since I've read this fic but this chapter was great as always. Hopefully, I can offer something more interesting when I reread the previous chapters.

Wow its been a long time since I've checked up on this story . _ I love the plot a lot and hope you continue soon if possible.

For some reason that I can't quite explain, I enjoyed this chapter more than any of the others. Maybe it was the inclusion of other characters or maybe it was the plot progression. But I found thid chapter captured my interest in a way some of the previous chapters did not. Good work.

Which gives us an answer of what Ketana knows: she saw Andros call Ashley to him - she didn't see Ashley run away.

I like this chapter, with the merry-go-around of perspectives, tying things together, in some ways.

With Zhane noticing, twice, that people have things on their minds; with Cassie taking a role similar to Zhane's; and Carlos taking a step closer to admitting his feelings.

Nice trick with TJ and the records, by the way - good way of getting the Earthborn to find out what the readers already know.

Cheers & See You Around,

Hagar

I really like some of your descriptive writing, but it seems like you're making all of the characters.. *SO* out of character. Your Ketana is like a Mary-Sue. So perfect but "broken" (if that makes any sense) and its getting annoying. But still, on a brighter note, I do love your writing style.

Good rhythm in the first scene: the dialogue is sharp, flowing, and the choreography contributes without hindering.

Carlos and Andros: you're really giving Carlos a wonderful treatment in this story - you manage to convery him as someone who's both emotional and observant, both deeply caring and able to reason. Andros - well - you're staying in-character for this story, which is definitely not simple, and the story he's telling is *definitely* something i'd like to see coming into play later. This is not something that can be left hanging!

Interesting how Carlos, of all the Earthborn, has managed to work his way closest to the Kerovans.

Cheers & See You Around,

Hagar

I *really* love this chapter. It's a real ride, this one - starting with the exposition scene in the beginning, and the insight it suggests about Zhane, and continuing with the drama of Ashley's illness - with Ketana's outburst being so wonderfully perfect, and the real sense of chaos conveyed by Zhane's POV of the argument.

And then the lovely cliff hanger in the end. Gotta love a good cliffie.

Cheers & See You Around,

Hagar

I'm still annoyed with myself for forgetting to update. War or not.

I love this chapter now even more than I had when I read it first. The characters and their interaction in this chapter are, as they were, wonderfully written, delicate, complex - you approach difficult subjects with enough care, attention and skill that you manage to pull it off with grace. With everything i've been through in my life these past two months, though, this chapter's content take on a more special meaning for me.

I notice subtle changes: Cassie reading for her communicator when she finds Ashley, Andros understanding the significance of the cut on Ketana's palm. Subtle, but significant.

And, of course, the question i've been bursting to ask: "Perhaps if the political climate hadn’t been so volatile at the time, no one would have cared if the bastard son of an unknown father –" - does this means what I *think* it's suggesting? Whoa!

Cheers & See You Around,

Hagar

I had almost forgotten how curiosity-invoking this chapter is.

The hints you're throwing with Ashley are tantalizing: she seems to be somehow linked to Ketana, but how? Has the Lover's Bane infection reversed its direction, somehow? That doesn't quite seem likely to me, considering that it is activated by *touch*. Is it some sort of resonance with Ketana and Andros' bond? Could be, because Ashley experiences reprieve when Ketana slams her mental shields.

And, the sandy-haired boy... Dharin?

Cheers & See You Around,

Hagar