... So many inconsistencies with trying to convert this to handle this many characters. You would have been a WHOLE LOT better off with an original plot.

... Ugh. OC and Canon pairings.

Cheetor I'm a bit more okay with, but Rattrap is canonically paired with Botania from Beast Machines. His secondary pairing is Dinobot (seeing as how they're robots, homosexual couples don't seem like they would disturb them.)

This is probably too late for you to change stuff... But I feel that I need to correct your character list on SEVERAL points.

First off, I don't see ANY original characters out of the transformers you have listed. Almost all of those have been toys or in a show at some point in time. The one I don't know about is 'Foxfire'. Shadow Panther is actually Ravage who DOES appear in the show. But is also a toy.

Nightscream appears in Beast Machines and is a MAXIMAL.

In addition to that. If you are going to steal from the toys and comics, you are missing a few cool ones. Notably Air Hammer and K-9.

As for my own comments. I do hope that when Dinobot II inevitably regains the memories of the original Dinobot, that you don't kill/leave him to rot. Dinobot is too cool a character to have killed off.

Also, it's notable that the wave that turns them into transmetals WOULD have affected Dinobot and Scorpinox (along with the other 3 characters who were in since the beginning of the shows; but you have already said they'll be transmetals) had they not been sealed in the CR chamber or killed off.

So... Yeah. Hope this helps and is not too late. I look forward to continue to read through this and may you start updating once more.

Oh. And by the way, you need to start a new line every time someone different speaks.

When will you update this story, it has been two years already and i want to know what happens next.

Lovely adaptation of A Better Mousetrap.

Now this is another example of the great writing and adaptation of Beast Wars episodes you've done so far. Might I suggest you put in a new Maximal Flyer named Wind Rider. Her beast mode could be that of a bird known as the Crane.

Nice way of adapting the Fallen Comrades Episode of Beast Wars. Good Job.

Ha! Loved The Lion King injection there, that was 1 of my fav scenes in the movie! And Jackfoot totally owned Iguanis' aft! Hillarious! 1 of the best action packed chaps so far!

great chapter, but stone man what happens next?, no update in two years, please don't let this great story dead.

You must have got ur inspiration from the junkyard scene in the movie The Iron Giant!

I just pictured Rachel's expression like Dean's from that very film at the sight of a giant robot in the junkard.

Best scene ever

XD

For a short chapter this is quite a good intro to a three part chapter.

Awesome job, just like all the other chapters. You portray the characters better than some writers, ad I'm really glad I chose to read this series!

Also, PUMBAA MOMENT! LOVED IT! :D :D :D :D

"They call me MR.PIG" You are the awesomest!

i loved it when you had a reference to the orignal movie

another very good chapter and like i had said before it is just like i remember when i had first read it.

a very good chapter and it is just like i remember when i had first read it.