Reviews for And Down We Go

Reviews For: And Down We Go

Alias Enigma 2008-08-07 ch 1,	abuseHm... I was browsing through the Little Circle of Reviewiness when I came across the link to this fic. It's good! ^^ Very well written and executed, even if it is a one-shot. Although, I suppose I cannot appreciate this fic entirely due to it's... er... pairing. Don't get me wrong. I don't hate this fic, and I am tolerant of such things... but being a heterosexual male, I suppose it was a little difficult for me to remain VERY interested in this piece (that, AND the fact that I could roll my eyes all day at the Heath/Legault pairing. No offense intended.) as opposed to someone who is more keen on fics that could fit in the 'slash' category. That being said, even though I'm not a large fan of this pairing or tragedies, I still think you did a very nice job with this. Keep it up! ^^
Cipher Admin Eevee 2007-11-22 ch 1,	abuseThe one thing I can't make up my mind about is whether this is a tragedy with a pseudo-happy ending or not. It works both ways, I guess... In any case, I liked the ending; dying in the aftermath of a battle with no true enemy but pain and injury, finally hidden and unnoticed, but ironically it doesn't matter any more... just... beautiful. Something I noticed, though: I believe the italics in paragraph 5 should be in the past tense, not the present, but I could be wrong... Anyway, I reiterate: beautiful story. :)
QuikSylver 2007-04-03 ch 1,	abuseWhaa... Death fics... -sobs- ...This is really depressing. No... ;-; Really well written... But a happy ending would have been better, although I suppose the entire story would have turned out differently... ~QS
Earthsick 2007-01-24 ch 1,	abuse... This fic always fills my eyes with tears because it's so sad. (Well, there are not much fics that have this effect on me. Even if I'm down.) I love it. Even if I usually dislike it when characters die xD I have to admit that I like happy endings more than sad ones. But this is fic is a expection and so is the other part of this fiction. (Well, I'm too lazy to write two reviews because the stories are the same just with other povs ^^" I hope you can forgive me ... xD)
Nariko.Hoshi 2006-07-05 ch 1,	abuseI'm not sure if I've reviewed this already... but if so, it deserves another. This is going on my favorites, despite my love for happy endings. Really, really amazing. ~Hoshi
fire-emblem-girl 2006-04-11 ch 1,	abuseomg. that was so sad...i've never even thought of heath and legult could be together...but...i've seen the light! they do say opposites attract! ;p beautiful fic, :'( something about two people being together as they die and slowly just going makes me incredibly sad. and don't worry, you wont have anymore of people saying "shonen ai's not really my thing..." HA HA, cause it IS my thing! ;p GREAT FIC!
Ormiss 2006-03-24 ch 1,	abuseI don't remember what Heath or Legault acted like in the game, so I won't comment on that. I especially like the lines about the grip on Legault's neck. It's an excellent way to subtly indicate both Heath's reaction (leaving some doubt as to how exactly he reacted, which is great) and his subsequent death. One thing that seemed a bit odd to me was that at one moment, Legault is saying how he's used up his elixer, but then he's telling Heath he should be able to find one on the dead bodies. It seems strange to me that Legault would not already have done so -if he truly believes that is true-. In the event that he doesn't believe himself, which is quite likely, I think that you could have mentioned it somehow. For a person who doesn't read shounen-ai, this is subtle enough that the topic is irrelevant to me. The actions and reactions are believeable and, again, subtle.
Min the Noodle 2006-02-28 ch 1,	abuseI'm personally not a Heath/Legault fan, but this was very pretty. And they both died! ;_; Usually angsty stories mean ONE person dies, but in this one there was no survivor. Beautifully written! I enjoyed it very much- especially the ending. (Is the quote really from their support conversation? The lyrics fit perfectly too.) -The Noodle Min
Writer Awakened 2006-02-17 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. I've never been a fan of shounen-ai, really (yaoi is a misnomer, I say), especially since I tend to think of Legault as one of those roguish womanizer types. Still, this was pretty interesting! The real problem, of course, is the length constraints. Under normal circumstances, a short story like this might work well on its own, but really, the story seems a little bare as is. The writing itself is definitely good, though, again, we don't really get much of a feel for the style in such a short time. For what there is though, it's well done, and we do at least get a little glimpse into Legault's mind. The problem here is Legault seems a bit OOC. Specifically, I don't see him coming out and reiterating what he had said and being so straightfoward. I always considered Legault to be the kind of devil-may-care, shifty, wry humorist type. Essentially, I don't quite see him being so sudden and direct: he probably would have tried to beat around the bush in some way. Aside from that, it was good! Again, the shortness keeps it from gaining emotional momentum, but it's still a sad story. Good work, and good luck in your future projects! ^_^
leradny 2006-01-24 ch 1,	abuse...Oh, man, I can't believe I didn't review this sooner. - But as they stood, Heath made a pained noise and fell back down, bringing Legault with him. "Urgh... Sorry, I think both my legs got broken..." - Just like Legault. "Right. I don't think I'm up for a walk either." COUGH HACK BLOOD-COMING-OUT-OF-LUNGS. I just love it when that happens. Morbid sense of humour, y'know. - "We won't be able to run this time, Legault." "Literally and figuratively, I think you're finally right about that." - Again, morbid sense of humour kicking in. Now, for the REAL reviewing: I enjoyed your attention to detail--Hyperion "letting his head sink down." I think the thousand-word-mark helped you with that, really :D. Now I will review your companion.
Randowm Person #164 2006-01-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseSimply put, I love it. Great fic. : ) And I love the song you put at the beginning and ending parts. (I love MCR to death).
Renn 2006-01-18 ch 1,	abuseWow. This was amazing. A-ma-zing! Seriously! I'm so moved now! That was an excellent use of their supports, and boy, are they inspiring or what? lol! Seriously though, I really really really REALLY loved it.
seasong 2006-01-09 ch 1,	abuseI’ll admit to reading this a while ago and more than once; therefore, I must apologize for such a late review. (And, the more than likely letdown you felt every time your hit counter rose but your review count didn’t. Or perhaps I’m the only one like that…) And, here I am, reading it again. I’ve noticed you changed it from the original. Not only have you lengthened it, you’ve also taken out the part Legault remarks that he’s happy that they’re all there together. I thought that was rather touching, but I’m sure you had your reasons for removing it. Speaking of removing, I don’t really like the ending. You know, the last line before the italics. It shifts the focus from Legault to “Nobody” and is rather abrupt. I think it subtracted from the sadness I felt upon finishing. This is just me nitpicking, so don’t take it to heart. However, you do make up for it by referencing the supports at the end--it really emphasizes the light intimacy (oxymoron, I know) of their relationship, romantic or otherwise. Anyway, carping aside, I loved how Heath put Hyperion before him and the way he didn’t drag himself away at Legault’s confession. It was very depressing how they spent their last moments together. Well, I think this review is long enough. I tend to blather on when I get on a roll like this. You deserve every kind word (and much more than three reviews, compared to some of the stuff around here…). Good job! :D
Lemurian-Girl 2005-12-23 ch 1,	abuseI don't usually read yaoi, but you doubled your efforts for my contest so... I think the saddest part was at the end, in the italics. When it referred back to their supports. It was well-written, and the death scene was nice. ~Lemurian-Girl~
Aseret Kitsune 2005-12-20 ch 1,	abuseThis was wonderful. I love the emotion and imagery. Very nicely written. Hope you don't mind, but I must add this to my C2.

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