Please! the next chapter soon!! I love this story!!
kisses
hikaru!

OK I'm not above beggin/grovelling this is such a great story please continue! I do realise it has been a while since you updated and I'm sure it's hard to start a story up again after leaving it for so long so if you don't I do understand. However I won't complain if you do add more :-)!
Your writing style is awesome I really enjoy the way you write action sequences!
Waiting with BAITED breath...
KJ

this is so good, i hope you're going to keep writing it!!

Really good job!!

Good Story Please Continue.

Cool story you have here - interesting takes on what might happen afterwards.

Hope you update soon,

TnTornado

Me again! This is still going smoothly, very nice.
One other thing- I started writing a fanfic myself, sort of an alternate 3rd movie. Would you mind taking a look?
[/shameless pimp]

"I guess I’m not in Kansas anymore.” She thought whimsically before walking out, shutting the door with a clank behind her."
The "she" shouldn't be capitalized. Other than that, it's good, especially under the circumstances. It sucks trying to write when you feel sucky.

La vostra madre- *pulls up BabelFish*. Madre means "mother", doesn't it? Oh . . .

Will Raven have a big part to play in the story? When you said "Rose", I thought you meant a girl- which would be interesting, actually. If they need to repopulate the Earth, how do they feel about people not having kids?

POTC reference. Nice. It's still going well; I have to go to bed now, I'll read (and review) the rest of it tomorrow.

Why would she be mad at him for what happened with the Architect? I need to watch Reloaded again. My first viewing nearly gave me heart failure . . .
Sixteen? Is that canon? Well, to be fair, one of my friends if fifteen, and he could pobably hack IRS if he wanted to. But we're Canadian, so he's have no reson to.
The story does have some video-game undertones, but it's doing pretty well. *keeps reading*

Interetsing. Am I the only one who wanted to thump Chimera upside the head?
The tasks make it seem a bit video-game-ish, but that can work . . . and I'm going to keep reading to see if it does.

Happy birthday! (a bit belated by now, but . . .)
M. *french accent* bacon. Let them try the bed! Please?

I like cheesy. And I liked the "I'm never letting go" reference to Reloaded. Now, time for the nitpicks! Just a few spelling errors: "Every time I close my eyes, I can see you dieing", and one sentence right after that: "Youwere alwaysthe One.” In that case, the letters just stuck together. I hope the criticism isn't too harsh; the story is still really good.

Still quite good. Just a few nitpicks (sorry, I go into ubercritique mode when I read) People use contractions- "our's, we're, etc"- when they speak, even if they are in limbo. And I don't think people call each other "love" anymore. Other than that stuff (like I said, I can be hypercritical" it was pretty good.