This story is funny. that five tons of hair gell myst have cost alot...

Hi! Nice s2ry, it may be short but sure crazily entertaining!

(Stares) okay... what do I make of it? Funny maybe? Kinda... weird? You have half of me cheering and half of me glaring girl. Aw well, since I don't flame, and even if I did, the half of me cheering wouldn't agree, I'll CHEER! YAY! WHOOPPE! (I like it enought to cheer)

...Huh?

1. Grammar. Captitalization. What happened to it?

2. You spelled the names wrong. It's Yugi, Kaiba, and Tristan.

3. This is the weirdest idea I've ever seen in a fic, but it's kind of funny, and would be funnier if you take some steps to improve it.

His name is KAIBA, hun, not Kiba. Yugi's name does not have a space and start working on your commas and spaces.

Instead of:

"Then next day ,yu-gi cousin,aunt ,uncle, and older brother came to visit for about two weeks,"

Try:

"Then next day, Yugi's cousin, aunt, uncle, and older brother came to visit for about two weeks.

Why do u even bother to read john flores' story he is invading the terriorties of fancfion readers and stop wasting ur life on him i bet he is mental retaraditon

short but not bad. sounds like me in the morning hahaha!

kaiba: you're ten times worse!

shut up!

(sorry, i had to steal your idea silveraqueen with having joey lol. but i like kaiba XD! it was just so tempting...i'll shut up now)

Short but true and some'ing similar to this and longer.-

joey:Hi...Bye