Reviews for Recovering Evil: The Return of Bankotsubo

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kochan1 2006-04-21 ch 8,	abuseHola...here's the (really belated) review. Descriptions are more natural and the start is nice. Nice work :) The part with Hitomi think about her father is good as it takes the focus off the situation at hand to tell us a little about Hitomi. Provided you don't go too indepth into it, an example of some kind (like how quickly her father recovered from injury at one stage perhaps) can often make it a little more interesting and personal to the reader. Perhaps for next time ^^ Oh, 'wandering slumber' seems to suggest sleepwalking to me btw...careful with that phrase. I pictured JL walking to trees in the forest and crashing into every 2nd one whilst asleep for some reason :D Descriptions as she walks through the forest are good to describe the changing wscene, nice to see you made a point of painting the forest through a little more. I'll split this part into individual thoughts on the chars: Hitomi: This gal's tough. I mean that. First, she got slammed into a tree after being caught unaware and it didn't seem to affect her. Seeing as Tengu was as upset as he was after his children were killed, I'm surprised he gave her much of a chance. After that, she got smacked by a tree trunk. Much as I don't like to think about it, I would have expected someone to go flying 50 feet through the forest with half the bones in their body pulverised rather than kneeling down with a grunt...but hey - that's just me ^^ The comment with wood splinters raining down is nice though. Tengu: This is something I had to stop and think about as well. He mentions not having any sympathy for humans - it would have been nice to hear why not :) Wwhat justifies killing human children in his mind while he sees the act of his own being destroyed being vile and cruel? I'm curious as to just how the Tengu DID come back from death as well. Perhaps that will be answered in the next chap :) Jann Lee: Gee, he doesn't much care for Hitomi does he? ^^ I'm guessing you meant him declaring that the Tengu would never harm the 'hair' of another human being after he's done with him? Yay! Gen Fu's here. I must admit I quite like your portrayal of him as he seems the person most in control of his feelings. Phew... Till next chap My Rant Ko-Chan
SugoiByoshin 2006-04-18 ch 9,	abuseA good ending to a great story, but the chapter seemed a bit shorter than the others! Its like, POW in your face, its over! Hehe, but i liked Jann's idea of using the trees. But we dunno how Hitomi miraculously survived her ambushed encounter with Tengu. I figured she was done for...hm. Well, look forward to reading the next one, and hopefully i'll get my mind focused enough to start on mine, >=).
SugoiByoshin 2006-04-10 ch 8,	abuseSMOKE CLOUD "And he appeared when least expected...or not cuz no one remembered him", hehe, wutz hot! Seems i came back at the right time. Yet another wonderful chapter waiting. But so much for Gen Fu's faith in the chitlins, now he's gotta take matters into his own wrinkled hands. I do hope Jann's okay tho, that was quite a fall...>=)
Scrooge 2006-04-10 ch 8,	abusehey thunder, great action and by far the best chapter so far. maybe im just a sucker for action...hehehe. perfect way to end it with Gen Fu coming to the rescue. can't wait to see what type of tricks he has. and what is up with Jann Lee...you direction fits his personality, but sometimes you just want to yell at him and say "No, bad idea Jann." bring the next one about soon.
Nirvana Fox 2006-04-09 ch 8,	abuse^^, so does that mean we'll get to see Gen Fu kick some Tengu ass at last. lol. The chapter was a great buildup to what I'm assuming to be the final battle between the fighters and the creature of legend, though I'm not so sure that Tengu would go down, even with Gen Fu standing right there. Again, the only thing that nagged me was the dialogue, but it's getting better. Keep at it. Nice chapter. Ja Ne.
TigerEyes2 2006-04-07 ch 8,	abuseOnce again this was very good :) I like your characterization of Hitomi. I know I have mentioned it before but I couldn't help but do it again. Her short conversation with Tengu reminded me of how much I enjoyed it. Again nice job with her. I love LeiFangs determination that she has had enough it very much fits in with how her character is written. :) Your descriptions are good and don't distract from what is going on. Thats a big that sometimes I still have some trouble with. I was big time description junkie in my "Destiny days" and though I have improved with it I still have my times where ton of editing out of description is a must. Nice job on that as well. I can't wait to see how this all wraps up!
.Mint.Creme.Oreo. 2006-04-06 ch 8,	abuseFINALLY! A decent DoA Adventure fic not starring the ninja quartet! Congratulations! You have my undying admiration. And so literate. Woot. Jann Lee, Lei Fang and Hitomi rock. I can't went to see how it all goes down. And isn't Tengu male? o.o;; How can he have babies?
Scrooge 2006-03-30 ch 1,	abuseAnother great chapter well done, and it seems like I'm not the only one that thinks so. I particularly like that action scene that you provided against the Baby Tengus, and a Jan Lee/Lei Fang quarrel looks like to be one of their downfall in a later battle. Keep bringing it, and I'll continuing reading as you post them. Don't keep us waiting too long. And again, great job.
kochan1 2006-03-23 ch 7,	abuseGood chapter - it certainly reminds me of a couple of things I should have done in my earlier works. :) The fight scene was short, but delivered what it needed to. Nothing like a bit of action to complement all that dialogue. The line with JL introducing imp to rock wall was juicy (No pun intended) :D As for the dialogue, you're certainly making use of it to show a lot more of what the characters are feeling towards each other. Common goal, different methodologies...ppl confiding in each other, belittling each other. Very common in a group, though that's a LOT of tension between 3 people ^^ One thing that you could probably spend some time on is your choice of wording. A lot of phrases and actions in the fic could be tweaked to describe things a bit better. I was also curious about LF getting upset with JL about 'stealing' the moment from her? With everyone having the same goal, I'd have thought that it wouldn't matter? To that point, if JL's hiding something emotionally...he's certainly covering it up well by being an idiot. Desperately in need of something redeeming qualities ^^ Good update...till the next :) My Rant Ko-Chan
Gleeful Melancholy 2006-03-23 ch 7,	abuseHey Thunder, long time no see! (Look I'm lucky Review #31. XD) I enjoyed this chapter a lot. It seemed the most in tune with the characters Itagaki presents to us, and the dialogue flowed the most natural it's ever been. My favorite part was the fight scene at the beginning, which definitely lives up to the Action/Adventure genre you've got going on. Waiting for the next one! --Red--
Nirvana Fox 2006-03-22 ch 7,	abuse...And I will take over your place, mwahahah! Um...sorry, I got caught up in the moment. lol Nice, nice update. The battle in the beginning was pretty good, though it was mostly in LeiFang's POV. Not that it mattered, one good POV is a lot better than jumbled multiple POVs, right? It seems as though Leifang and Hitomi are connected through death as well. Which'll explain their friendship, of course. Nothing to really denote here. As a whole, the chapter was pretty good. Ja, update soon, ne?
TigerEyes2 2006-03-22 ch 7,	abuseThis was a good chapter as well Your pacing is very good and I like the new additions to the plot. Some pretty wicked stuff grins I like Hitomi's attitude in this she seems to handle whatever comes at her rather well especially considering the kind of life she has had. After playing DOA 4 I did come around to liking her character a bit more than I had previously. Your characterization of her is very good I thought I should mention that. smile Jann wow is he arrogant or what... in a way it has always made me want to see him get stomped... wound that ego some might be good for him wink Can't wait to see where this heads next!
Scrooge 2006-02-27 ch 6,	abuseWow, what a predicament you have thrown them in...Baby Tengus vs Hitomi & Lei Fang, very interesting. I wonder who's the mother. How did they...ugh never mind, the thought of it gives me stomach aches...lmao. Good job Thunder, come with the update soon!
Nirvana Fox 2006-02-26 ch 6,	abuseHeh, you'd think that the DOA tournaments were simply feats of strength, but no, evil beings have to come out and start a fight with people. Hmph...I guess this is another feat of strength for them. And unsurpringly, Jann Lee is nowhere nearby to help the two of them. His arrogance is something to behold. Excellent chapter. Still, I have to nag you about the grammer. Just make sure you read it a second time before posting it, k? I'm anxiosly awaiting your next chapter, so update whenever you have the opportunity, alright?
Nirvana Fox 2006-02-26 ch 5,	abuseHeh, I suppose Tengu's plans for breakfast was ruined, huh? And I'll bet he's cursing to himself for it. lol I'm not quite sure about this myself, but I think that shinobi differs from ninja in the sense that one is more elite than the other. Like I said, I'm not sure yet, but it may be something you want to research.

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