Oh! I loved this Kate! It was delightful.

Aslan's Blessings,
Fierce

Well done with this story! Susan-based fan fics are my favorite, especially those stories that end with her joining her family in Narnia. This story contained a few "filler" chapters in which nothing significant took place; however, you made up for this in other chapters. The dialogue was somewhat misplaced and awkward--it seemed like it didn't really fit into a 1940s era. I like how you introduced an antagonist--Derik--to the story and the scene with Aslan and Derik wss very good. I love the ending and how Susan seeks forgiveness, which is of course granted to her. Very good story, Kate. I've added it to my favorites. Well done--I love it. :)

Hey Kate, my wonderful beta! So since winter break is here and I finally had a free moment to spare, I decided to go back and re-read this story. I'll admit that I just skimmed it over the summer!

Anywho, I'm only up to chapter four, but I love it. :) I hope you explain how Susan's trunk came to be in England! Since it's Christmas Eve and I'm about to go out to dinner with my family, however, the rest will have to wait until another day...Merry Christmas!

I just watched the fright before christmas(Danny Phantom) and now as i read this i keep reading in rhyme(and write so it seems i'm getting kinda freaked now) wonderful story but it took me FOREVER! to re-find it(it's like you remember a story or show you loved but you just can't remember the title or author)

Wow this amazing! I can't beleive! And I was crying so hard! And Now my parents are staring at me very oddly... that's not different then usual though! wow, I hope you continue to write!

i love the twist of derik being greedy just love it, this really makes it more interesting. Wonder how long it's going to take Susan to realize he's just using her to get to Narnia...

ya' know i always wondered is Susan could ever go back to narnia i think this is the perfect way to see if she could i mean, having her remember but pretend not to is a bit off why would she do that? but having aslan(it better be him) trying to gether to remember is great!!

YOur vocabulary is very rich and I really enjoyed this chapter overall. BVut there are a couple things that are driving me nuts. The first is that, the first stage after something tragic happens is shock and denial, and you sort of skipped that and went straight to the numb acceptance. YOu didn't really mention any tears. Once I lost something very very dear to me and tried not to cry myself to sleep every night. Maybe a little touch along those lines, but otherwise, this is one of the best Susan fics I've read! Please continue!

That was great. I am so glad Susan was able to go home with her family. Ihope you do post a final chapter or at least make the story say complete

I stumbled across this fic through a friend, and was afraid I wouldn't have time to read it. But then, today, I ended up having nothing to do and came back to this fic - and found that I couldn't leave it. ;D I really quite enjoyed it, and, though my knowledge in this area is lacking, found it very refreshing to read a story such as this. I don't usually read Narnia fics, but this one seems to me to be one of a kind.

So, even if I did arrive late to its telling, I greatly enjoyed hearing the tale. I have wondered from time to time what might have become of Susan, and with this happy ending I rather like how things all turned out for her. ;D

-Aimme-

Very nice. Very very nice, and very sweet. I like your take on how Susan returned. You wrote her very well, and I liked the reunion with her family. Derik is a psycho. Anyway, this was very good, and I hope you'll post an epilogue.
~King Caspian of Narnia

OMG! THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL! I LOVED IT! :D :P awesome job!!

great job, girly!! susan is my favorite character in narnia, and you did an excellent portrayel of her character. cant wait to see more!

You are wonderful. I love this story, it's awesome!

AH finally! I had given up hope! I should be very angry with you, but considering that I just read more, I'm content (for right now).
I loved it. Finally Susan is Queen Susan the Gentle again! Derik's a big meanie though... he should get hit by a mack truck (that's the fate I've been wishing on everyone who has been ** me off lately, just so you know). =P I look forward to more, whenever it may be (hopefully soon)!
Cheers!
x3*Mary