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| Liono3 2008-07-02 ch 7, anon. | abuseI think the story is going quite well as it has so far. But I do wonder if the Heroes will need to travel to Princess Estuko's homeland. And also if they will need to head to Altador. Please update when you can. |
| Xanthera 2007-03-27 ch 7, | abuseI love this! Yeah, I'm the same Xanthera that commented on your picture on deviantART. THIS IS AWESOME! The writing is wonderful, the action sequences are spine-tingling, and every time I scroll down, I'm surprised. Like that twist with Lucy and her friends at the end of this chapter. I have only two things I need to critique. First, there are quite a few grammatical errors. A rule of publishing fanfiction that I learned the hard way is, don't double-check your writing, TRIPLE-check it. The other thing is, no romance?! Just because they're kids?! Haven't you ever heard of "puppy love?" *is a rabid TorxRoberta fangirl* Even just a couple of subtle undertones and hints would satisfy me! How can anyone not love that pairing?! Okay, I'm done ranting now. ^.^ That was really mostly a joke, not a real critique. This thing is awesome, and I can't wait to see what happens next! Update! Oh, and I'd also like to see some more Neopets art on dA. You're art looks like it was done by the Neopets Staff! Keep up the fantastic writing and artwork! And expect lots of reviews from me. I tend to review every new chapter of the fanfics I have on my alert list. ;) |
| schwans 2006-10-15 ch 6, anon. | abuseHI! No I haven't forgotten about you and you fic. ^^ I hope you didn't forget about me. Your evil you left us with a cliffie! Update soon please. Me and my fire-breathing squirrel rabbit thingys wanna know what happens next!! |
| thereissuedpsychiatrist 2006-10-10 ch 6, | abuseYes,definitely to the NT idea,allthough instead of the east realm,call it ,dang,what was th name if that new,japanese world?yeah that one. |
| honestcat 2006-10-07 ch 6, anon. | abuseYou should so submit this to the Neopian Times! It's absolutely awsome! You have good describing words that make the story seem so real. (Way better than the one I wrote)...Can't wait for the next chapter and Roberta finally comes in. PS: This is honestcat from DA |
| Gilluin 2006-09-06 ch 6, anon. | abuseHey Vickie! ^-^ See, I didn't forget about your story! Well, this story is starting out wonderfully. I love reading your stuff because your OCs are always so interesting. :D Which reminds me, are you ever planning to take up your Animorphs story again? I kinda miss reading about Takehiro and Kaoru. x) |
| Dragoon182 2006-08-12 ch 6, | abuseGreat chap! Can't wait for next chap let me know when you update! |
| Ruby Warg 2006-08-09 ch 6, | abuseThat was such a good chapter! I'm going to put you on my fav author list. To bad this chapter wasn't posted this friday(Then I would have presents to open AND good fanfiction to read). Keep up the good work! |
| cherrytea 2006-08-08 ch 6, | abuseHi. :D This is really good. Way better than what I can do. xD And yes, you should try the Neopian Times. You'd probably get in. >:D |
| Ruby Warg 2006-08-01 ch 5, | abuseYay! That was such a great chapter. I'm going to add this story to my favorite stories list so I won't forget to read it. |
| thereissuedpsychiatrist 2006-07-31 ch 4, | abuseOMGOMGOMG!! I LOVE IT!*cliks add to fave story list* |
| Ruby Warg 2006-07-23 ch 3, | abuseThat was a great story! Please update soon. I'm going to get more NP so I can adopt pets and zap them to cool colors. Then I'm going to pound them again so they can go to a good home. Please tell me if you're intrested about it(that means the readers too). REMINDER: Update soon! |
| M. Thursday 2006-07-21 ch 2, anon. | abuseexcelent, wonderful! I really liked how you protrayed Dogan the samuri. please update, can't wait for next chapter |
| tormund_fan 2006-03-12 ch 2, anon. | abuseOMG! *drools* UPDATE! Id love to see the next chapter! and roberta in it |
| schwans 2006-01-21 ch 3, anon. | abuseLOVED IT!Keep it up! |