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| Cherry blossom 2007-08-28 ch 1, anon. | abusehi im CHERRY blossom please dont steal my name |
| tasia 2007-06-02 ch 1, anon. | abusewhat does aishiteru mean?oh yeah, and you rock this story |
| sakurapuppydoglover 2007-03-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery Good! I enjoyed it very much. |
| els1324 2006-09-18 ch 1,  | abuseAww! So sweet!! ^0^ |
| SNOW BOURDER 2006-09-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw, that was cute! |
| StandInTheRain95 2006-06-27 ch 1, | abusethat was okay... |
| arisuchan 2006-06-26 ch 1, anon. | abusei really liked this story,wish it was longer |
| Hawk of Endymion 2006-01-13 ch 1, | abuseDANG! thats was so good! (did i add enough o's?) i really like to search fo errors in a fic, and DANG! i couldnt find one! except the one about the tea. (every1 forgive me, i cant help myself from giving criticism, im such a perfectionist, though i can say that bout my fics) well, if you dont want this story to be given a bad remark, stop reading. if you are willing to forgive me, read on. you dont boil tea, makes it bitter, you boil the water, remove from fire and add the tea bag or tea leaves. well, aside from that, SUPER DUPER NICE FIC! oh yeah, can i have a cup without sugar pls? =) |
| Retah 2005-12-28 ch 1, | abusew00t! Kudos for SaiSakuSasu! XD |
| dunkmoonX 2005-12-26 ch 1, | abuseok. im here to review lol. It was kind of fast-paced. I think you kind of rushed into it. Your descriptions are great, but you need to describe more. Not too much though, too much descriptions can bore a reader. I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes. It was more on the content of the one-shot. Since its a one-shot, there is supposed to be an ending, but you kind of rushed it. You know that Sai paragraph you did about him? Where it is separated from the story with those dashes. I think you shouldn't have used the dashes, the paragraph is part of the story after all. You also used 'smirk' a lot. Using a word too many times can annoy a reader or lose their interest on the story. That really doesn't impress the reader to read more and more of it if they are just going to see the same word over and over again. I suggest you to use other words. But anyways, I like the plot. Especially the line where Sasuke said, "I should be one to initiate this kind of gesture." I could imagine Sasuke actually saying that. I can't wait to read your prologue. Keep on writing and reading! |
| Nkitty29 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abuseso cute...^-^ |
| sweetmaiden 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abuseNice and sweet. ^_^ Merry Christmas! |
| ASiii 2005-12-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseGREAT FIC! GO ARA! wehehehe. keep up the good work man! i'll be waiting for more of your work! ^_^ gud lak din sa skul, hehe (biglang nagtagalog, hehe). Piz Awt ^_^ V |
| Reiyuka Yumikoto 2005-12-24 ch 1, | abuseGreat OneShot! That is all... |
| Tears like Crystals 2005-12-24 ch 1, | abuseaw now that was adorable! very amusing also ^_^ |