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| KaRisa-Hime 2006-12-19 ch 1, | abuseI reallY LikE thIs fic kEeP gOinG anD wrItE mOrE |
| Yuniepie 2006-01-07 ch 1, | abuse*squeals* Cute! |
| Waizard 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abuseah man, this was so swet. I really think there should be more hitsu/matsu. I myself is a fan of hitsugaya and i have read most of the stories with him and there really should be more ^^ |
| Lorraine C. 2005-12-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseHaha. This is what I call short and sweet :D Great work and keep it up (write more HitsuxMatsu)! Happy Holidays! |
| Wielder of paperclips 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abuseThe way you write it, it seems as if this pairing IS possible... XP I actually prefer them having a brother-sister sort of realtionship, but this was a good try. I actually see Matsumoto doing something like this to tease him. Haha. XD Constructive Criticism: Your sentences are choppy; try to vary your sentence structures a bit by adding some description to them. ^_^ Watch your punctuation, too... With a bit of practice, I'm sure you'll get the hang of it. Keep up the writing and Merry Christmas to you as well. ^_^ |