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| Gagan 2006-07-14 ch 2, anon. | abusegr8 action."Die u traitors".Well why do u feel sorry for including violent scenes.Anything realted to kyoto and the shinsengumi has to have violent scenes. Who r we fighting? A really nice question. I think sayuri-chan shud have dragged etsuko-san out the backdoor,but then she's ur charecter.You must have thought of a reason for it. |
| Gagan 2006-07-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseReally nice chapter.Enjoyed all of it.You have described sayuri and her family really nicely. I think the sayuri's charecter is straight forward and has potential of accomplishing something. But, dont u think instead of 'Hikaru-san' , u shud use 'Hikaru neesan' for brother.pardon me if i'm wrong(still confused what *chan* really stands for) |
| anon 2006-05-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was lovely |
| Okitasgal 2006-05-03 ch 3, anon. | abuseWow... I loved this chapter. It was perfectly done! I'm beginning to like this girl, she seems so canon! Waiting for an update. |
| Okitasgal 2006-05-03 ch 2, anon. | abuseYes it was violent. Actually I was afraid she'd save the whole village and become a 'hero'. She's quite normal isn't she? It's interesting to see where this is going... |
| Okitasgal 2006-05-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was a good start... I'm glad to see no hint of mary-sueness. |
2006-03-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow... that was amazing... I never read something like that before! |
| nissepisse 2006-02-22 ch 2,  | abuseKeep going, like where this is headin! |
| White Rabbit Tale 2005-12-29 ch 1, | abuseHm...well I like it. It seems like a fic that is going to revolve very much around the OC, which is fine if you do it right, and you certainly seem capable. The things i noticed about this fic is that it is fairly historically accurate and plausible. Not much else to say but I love the tone of the narration. It isn't too flowery, but it certainly has its charm. I loved the last line, very ominous without being melodramatic. So I see good, interesting things ahead for this fic! |
| maxy-chan 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abuseWell.. um.. it's quite a good start... but.. where is the RK cast?! ;__; it really doesn't have anything to do with the series ^_^; it's a good start, if you put them in the next chap, though! Well, I guess I'll see! Bye-bye! |