keep up the good work

very romantic and fluffy story but lovely was interesting to read

One line of this rather struck me at a personal level--in the last chapter, I mean. The part where she wondered if it'd be worth it to go the NYC if she had to give up Sesshoumaru? That one. It just seemed...I don't know. As one who's been-there, done-that-and-made-the-opposite-choice as what I forecast she's going to make (or who knows? maybe she'll get both), I can't help but be a little peturbed by it.

Ah well, I'll be interested to see how it all plays out.

~Wren

Geez, I feel like Scrouge himself, grouching at you.

Or a beta.

Do you need a beta?

Bah. At any rate, this story reads really well. It has a lot of charm and warmth, not to mention good characterization and interesting dialogue. Kagome and Sesshoumaru seem like they've both sashayed from right between the pages of a Nora Roberts book...but that's a double-bladed compliment in a way. What I really liked in your other K/S fic was how you took the time to do it /right/, something that set you apart in style from ha-penny harliquin writers (not that that applies to NR, of course) who seem to write by a series of guide lines, chink-chink-chink and they've a cookie-cutter book to ship off to the publishers.

You kinda had that feel here, except I think that it stems more from a haste to just /get it done/ than anything else. It was like you had these scenes in your mind and certain parts of the story were just vehicles to get from point A to point B.

Does this make any sense? I really don't want to just be 'rawr' atcha all the time because I really do enjoy reading your stuff.

Anyways, best wishes.
Wren~

Hm...while I think I can understand twhy you didn't turn it into a hot and steamy lemon last chapter, I do think that there's something missing. Something--not that I'm doing an excellent job of explaining it--but something that portrays that sweetness and closeness you see them experiencing. It's not so much the physical acts themselves, though I thought it was cute when he kissed her nose--but it was just that. Cute.

Cute is from a by-standers position. Sweet is from one who had expereinced it. It's that difference that shows something is missing here, because readers should feel as if they've experienced what the character has. Perhaps, and I'm not sure if this is the answer, you should delve more into what they feel as they feel in that scene.

Hope this helps!
Wren

i loved the story, origianl and all. short and to the point. i guess i'm just used to very alot i guess but i'm glad i stuck with this and its awesome! swear it!

hehehe... brilliant. even though its short it works out great

omg, i'm like on the verge of crying. this is hella great

oh... its good, really good. i cant wait till i finish it. it's really short in chapters but it's still good. so lets press play...

Great story!
I loved it!
It was so sweet and romantic!

this was really fun to read!! i like all of your stories! lol

Aww that was really sweet! I want to get myself a Sesshoumaru for Christmas too :)

so kawaii
and a hint of perverseness
but thats what makes a good story, ne?

Aw! KAWAI! I have read stories by Rinseternalsoul and so I know who you are talking about when you said you got hints from that writer. Very nice job.

This was a very nice holiday fic, not too sugary, and yet not too flat either. Just enough fluff to make you look at it and melt a little.

*grins*

DD

that was sweet i love it