perfect - so cute and also a little bit funny. I think it's rounded(i hope it' the right word)

go on writing, i would like to read more SatXRisa from you

Aya-chan! That was very cute. There was a LOT of parenthesys, which was kinda annoying. The metaphors--oh, the metaphors! Ah, authors admiration is weird, I know. Fluff would've been nice.


Dollie-kun!

Freaken awsome! I admire your skills!! I love it so much!! on the favorites list it goes...

*laughs*kinda funny...

[ swoons ] [ faints ] [ awakes ] [ swoons again ] that was so cute! but i thought his response would've been, "i have now". like right after the kiss. please post more.

Not too OOC...and so sweet! XD

At first I thought Satoshi was a bit OOC but since you mentioned they were in a relationship, it wasn't so hard to imagine Hiwatari-kun acting all mischievous...^_^

Good job, Aya-san! Please, update soon!

LOL!! ^^ Yay! Fluff!

Update soon! XD

I know. Someone up there DOES love me. Just as I love your fiction. It is so sweet. I want a strawberry-topped-chocolate-cake-flavored kiss from Satoshi, but no..Risa gets him. Mm. But I'll just have to settle for strawberr-topped chocolate cake then, won't I? Wonderful "kiss" here, and keep writing these wonderful things. (Beautiful thought-lines.)

Haven't heard from you in so long! :)
This is to cute. Haha I liked how you portrayed Satoshi here.
Great job!

No...it's cute, really! ^__^

i DONT CARE if he's ooc. actually, he's slightly ooc, as in his thoughts, but overall he's still ic... lol i LIKES IT. woot. i shall never look at strawberries, chocolate cakes and everything else pink in general. oh goodness. my fren likes pink.
dark: that cool guy can love?
dont insult him. he's i quote 'one of the most lickable 14-year olds'. lol. i didnt say that!

heh , its nice

Hehe! So cute! XD