 CloeyMarie 2005-12-30 . chapter 1I really liked this. Normally I stay clear of the fictions that feature them in a band but this one called out to me and I'm so happy that I did read it. You have excelent charectorization, lovely description, and it just flows along very nicely. Though I must say that the "...Obviously disturbed, perturbed, and any other words I'm too lazy to find that sound like that..." Made it seem less put together and professinal then this really is, there really wasn't a need to have another word that rhymed.
That was my only nit pick though. Other then that a wonderful job so please keep up the good work! -Cloey Marie- |