Overall, this chapter was O.K. The idea and plot of this chapter are great, however, the dialogue was uninteresting and undescriptive. I can't wait to read your second chapter and find out exactly what Team Rocket's up to!

WOW! '99? Its amazing at how ooollllddd some of these fics are! Man, I was like 1 or 2 years old at that time!

You know, for a first fic, it wasn't that bad. It was pretty creative. Sure, the girl was a bit too perfect, but she was all right. It also helps that she was called Roxanne and I like Brock with the gym leader Roxanne from the anime, who is also a paragon of virtue. It's actually amazing how similar your Roxanne is to the anime one-smart, kindhearted, and Brock manages to pretty much keep his cool and he respected both Roxannes. The anime gym leader and yours also held Brock in high regard. It's really uncanny. Anyway, I had fun reading the fic. It was worth the time to get through.

This story is just unique !

I loved it !

Please write more !

Thankz,

Lucie

I just wanted to tell you that I really, really enjoyed reading this fic.

You have talent, and I hope that you write more in future. :)

nice sweet story!

It's OK, but the whole James/Roxanne/flashback thing is unconvincing. AND ARBOK IS NOT HIDEOUS!

I still don't get HOW Roxanne got control of the gym. And what is so bad about her? Pokemon get injured all the time in battles; that's what the Pokemon Centres are for. And Brock never stops Ash/Pikachu from injuring Team Rocket and their Pokemon... Other than those gripes, a well-written fic.