 of wonderlands and alices 8/4/06 . chapter 1omgosh, are you kidding me? this was soo great; sure, neji is a little ooc but who knows - maybe this is how he'll turn out! Besides, you're right, kakashi is pretty crazy and gai...c'mon, gai. do i even have to say it?
[It took him several weeks and countless hours of research to finally conclude that he was, indeed, in love.] i love this. how awesome. i mean, at some point in the story, it was like i was IN neji's head. you write so well, i understand his insane logic, his mad need to understand love, and his quest to understand Ino and what she's doing to him.
[His personal space was shockingly violated, something that had never happened in the past and should not happen in the present, as well as the future.] i seriously can't get over how wonderfully written this is, i mean, not only is this a rarity in itself (neji x ino) but it's written in such a way that the story grabs you and refuses to let go. only some authors write about this pairing and so very few are good.
but this! i'm shocked. in awe. speechless...well, not really, seeing as how this review is getting pretty long. i love it, funny, inspiring, cute, and a bit sad. great job, and i cannot express to you just how much i'm looking forward to the next chapter. hmm, what if i said, i'm looking forward to it..a LOT? nah, that wouldn't cover it but i guess it'll have to do. ohh, i know! i'm looking forward to it...a lot x infinity!
yatta! x3
oh, and before i forget, you tend to leave out words and have some unfinished. [“I beg you pardon, I must’ve lost myself back there.”] I believe you meant to put 'i beg your pardon'. it's not an earth-shattering error but there are many scattered throughout the fic and they get very annoying. a simple, quick proofread would help. well anyways, i hope to read the next part soon. |