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| Veldrin 2007-07-04 ch 6,  | abuseYou really need to continue this, it's too good to stop there. |
| raeban 2007-02-03 ch 6, | abuseThis is very interesting. I hope you continue. |
| darkfinder 2007-01-30 ch 6, | abusewell that was interesting . |
| Amon-ra1996 2007-01-30 ch 6, | abuseI have eagerly being awaiting this chapter and it was well worth the wait. Things are defiantly becoming interesting with Lee seeing number six in the corridor. Poor Lee is so confused, but will he fully remember what has occurred and actually confide in his farther and the president, as they did not trust Balter already. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| darkfinder 2006-07-03 ch 5, | abuseprevious chapter was better . |
| pilotlover 2006-07-03 ch 5, | abuseVery intriguing so far. Can't wait to see where this goes. Thanks. Marilyn |
| Ghost Owl 2006-02-19 ch 4, | abuseI really like this story. You're developing extremely well as a writer and I enjoy reading your work. The first chapter stood alone very well and the ending, with its shattering revelation, worked a treat. The continuation of the story reveals your skill at coming up with plausible explanations for things that might not otherwise make sense. You stated in your notes that you don't ascribe to the idea of Lee Adama being a cylon and you wrote your way around it very cleverly. To make this review well rounded I'm supposed to make a recommendation for improvement. What I would suggest is pretty minor: "Suddenly he was..." (first chapter, flashing back to "Hand of God") is a bit of a technical no-no. Just keep an eye out for little things like that. (Note that I had to really LOOK for a nit to pick, here!) Your pacing is generally better than that. Overall so far, this is a well crafted piece. The lack of spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors is commendable and suggests attention to detail, which is evident throughout your work. You could give lessons in pacing. Your sentence structure is excellent in this regard. The explanation for Lee being a "cylon" was VERY clever and you rendition of Six seems to me to be very much in character. Baltar seems unusually courageous until you point out that he's still looking out for himself. Nicely done. Keep up the good work Ghostowl (formerly whiteowl) |
| angry penguin 2006-02-12 ch 4, | abuseThe tables have been turned. Congratulations, you had me thinking that Lee was dead. Is there going to be more chapters? |
| Pythian Raina 2006-02-02 ch 3, | abuseWow that was really good! Is there a sequel planned? |
| SG1SamFan 2006-01-29 ch 3, | abuseWow! That was *totally* unexpected. I can't believe you actually did that. I say again: wow. Thanks for a riveting story! Emily |
| starbuck042786 2006-01-29 ch 3, | abuseOh for the love of Pete, THATS WHERE YOU'RE GONNA LEAVE US!? NO! lol- good story, I likey. |
| Xerxez 2006-01-17 ch 2, | abuseIn true spirit of the New Battlestar Galactica show, you got the paranoia and angst down perfectly. |
| Pythian Raina 2006-01-16 ch 2, | abuseOh please continue! |
| darkfinder 2006-01-16 ch 2, | abuseman you can't leave it at that . this is good . |
| SG1SamFan 2006-01-16 ch 2, | abuseThis could have been left as a one-shot, but the final chapter was just *wow.* It touches upon questions that the show has explored: What is the nature of perception? What does it mean to be human? Do the Cylons represent evil, or just the worst of mankind? At the end of this fic, you left it a little ambiguous as to whether Lee is actually a Cylon or just crazy. I really liked that. Thanks for a thought-provoking piece. Emily |