I think with these stories you have a lot of excellent beginnings, but I think you might want to consider making them fuller and longer. For example, I liked the fourth chapter. I assume it is after Inkdeath, and I see a lot of potential there. I am also assuming that Meggie was the one who taught Farid to read and write. Maybe you could go with that and show the process of Meggie teaching him. I could see you doing a really sweet story with that.

My favorite chapter was your first one. I thought it was the best written and also the most complete of all the stories here. You also did an excellent job there with bringing out the characterization of Meggie and Farid. The other chapters are so short that I didn't get so much characterization from them.

To sum up, you really are an excellent writer and have some great premises, but I think you should consider filling the beginnings that you have here out, maybe even turning some of them into seperate stories. God bless you and keep on writing, my friend!

-Sauron Gorthaur

I liked it!

Hey! I loved your story! The second chapter poem was really good! I love poetry. A million thanks for reviewing my story and God bless you too!

I LOVED IT!

I like it, but it does have room for improvement, just like any other story. You need to give a little more "setting."

In the first chapter, in the very beginning, where does it start? Does it start right where Cornelia Funke left off, or a little bit later? If you're starting where she left off, the sun wouldn't be setting behind the trees- they're stuck underground in an abandoned mine!

In the 2nd chapter, I like the poem.

3rd Chapter- It sounds right, but where it says:"Then, one day, everything dissolved away and Farid saw Meggie," you need to put "when Farid saw Meggie."

Chapter 4- Where is Farid? Also, I thought he didn't know how to write- Meggie tried to teach him, but Inkspell says he couldn't read or write.

I love chapter 5!

Keep Writin'!

-computerznandbks4ever

Ohh this is great! Its so... I don't know how to put it but its leaves you feeling like you've just watched a fantastic movie!



By the way, long time no chat, almostinsane!

i really liked it especially chapter 5 it was very well written

i really really like it but from reading your story i think i should reread Inkheart and Inkspell before Inkdeath comes out hm...

this story is SO sweet! keep wrighting!

The story was great I liked that it wasn't just Farid and Meggie and that it had some thoughts from the Black Prince in it.

that was so good, the part about the black prince chuckling to himself was so funny

aw this is so sweet i love this you are an amazing aouther

luving it! update soon!

eclipsed heart

i like it so far :)

update soon!

eclipsed heart

1 thing. Farid can't read or write.