 NaruTemlover 2009-12-12 . chapter 12Is asking again for you to update this story. Is hoping that you have not given up on this story. |
 bloodgolore 2009-12-05 . chapter 12I love this! please update or else! |
 bloodgolore 2009-12-05 . chapter 13Oh my gosh, please update! I will get mad if you don't. Seriously. |
 kk1987 2009-11-21 . chapter 13 I realise it hasn't be updated in such along time, but please, please, please don't give up on this story and update soon. |
 shadowdragon4444 2009-11-18 . chapter 13Please pick this story back up. I simply love it. It is one of my favorites. I got off of Fanfiction for a while and it took me for ever to find this story again. I am very sad that you haven't updated in so long. PLEASE UPDATE ASAP! |
 PeterAmaranth09 2009-10-24 . chapter 13ah why is the best ones never finished :(
this is brilliant pure brilliance :) |
 Amore 2009-10-03 . chapter 6 Seriously, I had tears in my eyes from laughing so much. It should be illegal to be so funny, I nearly died from overexposure to pure awesomeness ;D |
 brezy bri 2009-09-18 . chapter 13NO!
it ends here. no no no no no no no no.
i am in love with this story. like literally. i'm serious, ive had so much fun reading this! i love it! everything about it is amazing. but alas it had been 3 years since an update, but i will stil put it on alert, just in case.. wink wink nudge nudge.
love love love love love it all! |
 LoyalHufflepuffTara 2009-09-16 . chapter 8=D great story i love it |
 taintedlegacy 2009-09-13 . chapter 13Awesome story! I really hope this isn't abandoned! |
 WhiteElfElder 2009-09-11 . chapter 13The dark clouds gather, the thunder booms, the lightning flashes...and Harry/Ryan runs around pranking the little boys and girls of the world. I like this story as it is a nice blend of comedy (which has me laughing quite a lot) and drama. |
 dontcallmemadeline 2009-08-29 . chapter 13This is good, but are you ever going to update it? It was just getting interesting... |
 Jenny 2009-08-28 . chapter 1 Ok, I can't even read past the first chapter. While the story might be fine, it's a pet peeve of mine that I can't stand it when people completely mangle Latin in order to try and make their story seem more 'real'.
"Can is non patesco aspicio super visio illorum is has proditor": As near as I can actually translate it comes out as "Can(eng?) he not I am revealed I look upon above/upon appearance the ones whose he has(eng?) betrayer." It's obvious you simply plugged this phrase into a generic 'translator' to come up with the words. Unfortunately, Latin has numerous declensions and conjugations for nouns and verbs, and cannot be simply translated word by word and be coherent.
The use of 'is' for 'he' is redundant, as the verb in the sentence is understood to contain it. Your verbs are all 1st person present tense, and as such are not conjugated correctly for the meaning you wish to get across. Your nouns are incorrectly declined. Patesco means 'to be laid open, bare, exposed, to be revealed', so you are using an incorrect homonym here. The word you are looking for is 'bear'. Proditor is a noun meaning 'betrayer', not a verb.
A more proper Latin translation of the phrase "Can he not bear to look upon the faces of those who he has betrayed?" would be: Non haberaris facultatis aspicere facies populorum qui prodidi?
Please refrain from using Latin if you can't be bothered to put a little effort into at least attempting to do it correctly. |
 LivingRightNow 2009-08-26 . chapter 13i luv ur story...but plsplspls update! how can u just abadon it?? |
 Adrence 2009-08-24 . chapter 6 This story is Hilarious! This is brilliant! I'm going to keep reading it now... Hope you update! |