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| Mari Knickerbocker 2007-04-11 ch 1,  | abusethis is brillent. i would have never thought that such a thing as a discarded shifter could effect Luke's life. another birllent concpet, truly it is |
| Deja Know I Been Lookin For... 2006-09-18 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was a very interesting one-shot! You are a very skilled writer with a talent for description. You caught Luke's emotions and actions very well. In short, this is a great fic. I guess if I were to try to give constructive criticism for anything (which is certainly hard to do with this fic), it would be a minor note that there are a few punctuation spacing issues (Wait a minute ! Love her ?) and I guess I would have to say that you have just a little (just a teeny bit, mind you, and better too much than too little I guess (I am usually guilty of the latter)) too much detail. For instance: "Finally he got the wrench head over the bolt, and he pulled up on it with all of his strength, his biceps tight beneath the sleeve of his tunic." The last bit "his biceps tight beneath the sleeve of his tunic" isn't quite necessary to the story. But that is simply my opinion, of course. Most of the time, your details are fantastic and right on the mark, like with Luke's fumbling around with his speeder. In the conversation with Luke and Owen, you made me wonder about Owen's feelings. His is a POV that we don't see too often, and even though we don't see his private feelings in this fic, I think you do a great job of hinting at them. I also really enjoy the second to last paragraph-- very powerful. Great job! You're a very talented writer! |
| BabaBiP 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuse10+ |
| Treenahasthaal 2006-02-11 ch 1, | abuseA great idea - Luke stumbling upon Anakin;s pain and his love for his mother. I loved the scene with Anakin on Tatooine - being where his son would grow up. It seems right that there would be some residue other than Owen's bitterness. |
| MJ Mink 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseNicely done. I wonder if Luke will (or has already) subconsciously wonder if the mysterious memories come from Anakin? And I wonder if there's going to be a scene from Vader's POV in your other story, The Vader Chronicles? :) |
| Nimbirosa 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseAn interesting take on how Luke might find out about his father, even if it wasn't so purposeful. Excellent! |
| Ann Jinn 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseGreat job, very good insight. |
| M2S 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseI stumbled onto this fanfic - normally I stick in the CSI realm. Anyway, great job. I like the parallels between Luke and Anakin, and the idea that Anakin left his psychic imprint on the shifter knob. Good job. |