Finaly a great characterisation of Remus (AND Sirius). Congrats, loved it!

I really enjoy your writing. The plots are good, the prose literate and your characterizations are well thought out.

This is an amazing piece - as, in fact, are all of your works. Your characterisations of all of them are so remarkably dead on - I confess that they have done more to shape my perceptions of Remus and Snape than any other works. Absolutely brilliant. You possess a felicity of expression which is so stunning it makes me despair of ever writing anything half as good. I beg of you to write more! ~ Lone One.

Oh, you have made me so happy by writing about Remus again! I especially loved Sirius coming to understand that his apparent timidity was actually an iron-clad caution that comes from being constantly braced. I also really liked Remus' silent interaction with Snape during potions - so typical of both of them. His acceptance of Sirius' "sticking up for him" by sabotaging Snape at the end was a moral defeat and an emotional victory - it's sad to see his friendships grow on such terms, but I can understand it. But I think Sirius plays to a lot more than his weaknesses - although Sirius does invite him to take more of a blind eye towards arrogance and bullying than he should, he also invites him to be a kid and to be confident in himself, both of which are positives and the first of which comes across in your story very well.

I think your tack of describing Sirius' initial motive for friendship as an interest in shaking Remus' control (the ultimate challenge) is interesting, but it seems almost too manipulative for someone as impulsive and emotional as Sirius. It's a good place to start the relationship, but I think, in the long term, friendship for Sirius is a deeply emotional matter. You've painted a great portrait of him at eleven, although he's almost too close to being unlikable. But I know how you develop his character later, and I'd love to see more of it - he came across wonderfully in your other story about Remus letting go of his self-control (the image of Sirius circling around Remus, not understanding but trying to learn, is a perfect development of this friendship - the loyalty and empathy have set in, but the mystery of adultness that Remus represents is still there).

I love seeing Remus in your stories, especially described through another character's eyes. You capture all the things that are wonderful about him, and make me forgive the times he gives in when he shouldn't have. Thanks again for writing.

oh, i love you.

I loved this. It's so hard to write about being eleven when you're not (I'm assuming you're not...if you are, you must be quite the child genius), and I think you did it really well. I particularly liked the way you conveyed Remus' obvious inner dilemas - even though it's from Sirius' point of view, I felt as if I knew what Remus was thinking.

Now I'm off to read the one where Remus breaks Snape's nose. *evil grin*

Hello!

I just read your story and all I can say is: brilliant! I want more!

Your characterisation of Sirius is very interesting. I don´t think, he hated all the luxury and so on from the beginning, like you.

(Sorry for my English, I´m German and just learning for my exams. There´s no space in my brain for vocabularies...)

Greetings,

Goddess

A good story about the begin of the marauder's friendship. I like you characterization of Sirius, because he's in a way still the typical pureblood ("There was no way he could disappoint because he was Sirius Black"), but he's beginning to change, even if he dosen't realizes it yet.

I was laughing about your metaphor ("Sirius is a puppy. Rash, devoted, and when he’s sitting next to the stain on the carpet wagging his tail and whimpering softly you want to forgive him everything."), not only because it fits, but also it reminds me of my own dog, who was excatly like this half a year ago *g*