that was awesome! i really REALLY hope you continue it! PLEASE?!?!?! for me, at least?!

yup yup i see the button.

UPDATE ok you have to, leaving a story on a cliffy is mean!!

is he alive now? that would be so cool... oh yeah good story really descriptive

This is pretty good, but next time stick to one tense, unless you start talking about somthing that happened before. In that case use "had." (As in, "he had looked at the destroyed house...") This will make your writing much more easy to follow.