The story itself was very interesting. Good job on the characters staying believably in character -even the dialog (which many get 'off') was most of the time able to follow who said what even without being told. Which is good because often it wasn't .

The actual writing could be improved however -which I'm sure yours has in the time since this story was written. ^_^ So I really won't go into that, or the random errors dotted throughout (even if I bothered to recollect specifics).

It was a little confusing trying to figure out Rin's age in comparison to the boys' ... I'm guessing at least 20? However many years she's older than Michiko, who I'm guessing is around 15. *crinkles brow* Yes... the ages are a bit confusing to understand.

Everything was rather... fast-paced too. Makes it a little less believable considering the demons involved. *ponders* Well... somewhat.

Thanks for writing!

That was friggin cool! I've been wanting someone to make an Inuyasha's Daughter and Hiei story before I did. So know i'm gonna start working on mine and don't worry my character and story plot is totally different from yours so no stealing! Keep up the awesome-ness work!